NO

NO

 

heads oscillate

            scalpels through flesh

                    dissect another road-kill hope

                       find only shadows

             that dance on a blank white scream

 

the root illudes the bloom

the bloom eludes the root

forever

Reviews

[OT]

nooo ha jeez you would use oscillate before me grr I'll have to change a line now lol ha I love the clinical feel to it - it's very cold almost "scalpels" and dissections - also intrigued by your use of illudes as opposed to eludes hmm clever, clever I like it!! Edit: ha I see you considered the elude and put it in lol

[moonbeam40]

your poem will help others who identify with relapsing. a good poem , moonbeam.

[Robin]

'No' does have a sharp edge just like its kin none and never and not , and so damn final ...

[Kerry O'Connor]

The epigram contains such wisdom, it could be carved in stone.

[Moflo]

"The root illudes the bloom/the bloom eludes the root/forever." Love it. Great word play.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

2 single letters which when combined can destroy a person's world. The concept of rejection is something so many fear and you portrayed is very well in a great short, sharp manner.