Echo

Echo

 

I need a topic,

A focus,

A direction…

 

I need a light in this muddled mess called mine.

Something to see beyond the glass.

Something…

anything.

I need a breath….

a small rumble,

a radiance strumming from within.

 

I forget all about you in my days of every.

You.

With the beautiful, smiling eyes.

YOU.

With the sweet, darling soul of gold,

devoted as melded steel to the cadence of mine heart.

I ignored the reflection for far too long.

Looking so deep and long,

spanning the empty space,

seemingly.

So. Exceedingly. Long.

 

Always looking to the others.

They.

And them,

and her and she.

Grasping for something more,

something different,

something of yours….

 

But the chords struck my heart again,

and there you were.

In all the clarity of my focus,

you were there.

You…

were right here.

 

 

Reviews

[J]

i always marvel at the number of views vs the number of reviews. that often tells me how good the poetry is. lol those who read and run away from fear of complexity; . . . it's too hard to understand, i might have to think; and newbies who just want to rack up points [what for again?]

i digress [sorry]. maybe it really is just that simple. the complications, secret passageways, dark basements aren't really there t'all. there is no hidden agenda, no drama . . . maybe just open, honest caring. maybe he is that genuine.

beautiful. just beautiful. x

[Seriana]

Dearest, this was one of the nicest things anyone could say. You've put into words the very thoughts that have crossed my mind many times. I'm happy if my poetry entertains but most importantly it is a piece of me given out and if even one person feels something from it, then the gift has been received. Thank you again. My heart is content tonight seeing you drop by! We will catch up soon. I promise.

[Laurierose]

There was a variety of tempo throughout this piece. It was like a roller coaster and you've invited us to share a ride. Each twist and turn led me to believe something between each stanza. I'm reminded of the "Echo" when I need inspiration or direction. The many ideas that ricochet in my mind help me piece together something that I can polish later. This piece was definitely up my alley and a lot more than random streams of thought. It's marvelous. Great read!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful- sometimes what we are looking for is right there infront of us but we look everywhere else for it just to learn it was there all along, wonderful writing🌹

[Tobes]

That person who reviewed this a couple of days ago made a good point. Talent and depth is often intimidating.
Again, good stuff.
I am not a regular to the cafe, but I'd just like to say that you are pretty good and I like to look at the whole body of work to get an idea of the writer and where they are coming from.
Relationships are the best friend of powerful writing, for most. Sounds like you've had a lot of source material. Me, too.
I'm going to revisit your stuff later, but just know that what you're putting out there is appreciated.

[SkinlessFrank]

oh where does such clarity of mind come from, and why can't it always be so clear...why all this sloshing around in mud for the nuggets of gold?

[Pete]

sometimes we don't realize what we had until it's gone. this is quite powerful and creative. i like the way it reads - very reinforcing and flows nicely.

[Seriana]

Thank you so much for your kind review. :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Ah...it's like the old adage, "You can't see the forest for the trees"...and sometimes we are so close to something it blurs our vision and distorts the clear image in our minds...or hearts. I enjoyed this. Very eloquently worded and elegantly presented.

[Periac]

With the sweet, darling soul of gold,
devoted as melded steel to the cadence of mine heart.

a wonderfully strong piece that was forceful at times but held strong a balance with submission

it read to me as such a matter of fact swirl

[An owl on the moon]

Your words are filled with such a beautiful longing, tender and sacred in the wonder and waiting. And in your thoughts, living in this echoed place, you speak sighs that we all know in deeper places, that we feel and speak and desire. We are all reaching, hoping, seeking.

[Sami Khalil]

This is marvelous. I like all the aspects of this write. Focus is very necessary and a powerful tool to look through or seek. We weed out all the distractions and just be in unity with the goal or target. Love is two focused on oneness. Bravo

[Seriana]

Thank you so much for your review Sami! I really appreciate your thoughts and care, fellow poet. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. Any time.