Ghost towns in the Ocean

 

Ghost towns in the ocean

 

A single nostalgic tear

falls to the waters below

Streaming ripples echo

Echo

Echo

Echo

across a liquid oasis

A life goes on

in endless pools of tidy nights

journeying on the waves

of reckless temples

flooded

 

What happened to love’s sanctuary?

 

One, two, three

each tear falls effortlessly

Like grains of sand through an hourglass

quiet tears colliding

sliding

down through the liquid vortex

a silent whirlpool

hauling in the wounded heart

swallowing it in the sea

 

Briny souls mesh together

Alone

In this solemn hour

Afloat in a tomb

of ghost towns in the ocean

Reviews

[Periac]

A single nostalgic tear
falls to the waters below
Streaming ripples echo
Echo
Echo
Echo
across a liquid oasis
A lifegoes on
in endless pools of tidy nights
journeying on the waves
of reckless temples
flooded
What happened to love's sanctuary?

this could have stood alone as a remarkablke write.....but you then finished it off with another great verse.....love's sanctuary........amazing.......fav....

[shadadakiya]

great work

[Mel Stevens]

A very picturesque poem. I could picture everything, the words flowed beautifully and the writing itself was so elegant.

[Muddy B.]

A single nostalgic tear

falls to the waters below

Streaming ripples echo

Echo

Echo

Echo

OK WHO DOESTHIS
NO ONE
THAT WAS A GREAT IDEA
IT GRASPED ME BEFORE I COULD READ ON
I LOVED THAT

AS FOR THE POEM
BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN
IT KEPT ME IN ONE PLACE
AND I WAS NOT LOST
GREATLY WRITTEN
KEEP UP THE AMAZING WORK

I HOPE TO SOON HEAR FROM YOU

[dilettante1890]

Beautiful! And elegiac. I'm adding this to my favorites.

[Mysty Rayn]

Wow.... I am speechless. This is so powerful. Fantastic!

[Mintwhiskers]

I loved the way u wrote this in different fonts so wonderful

[Forest Green]

Visually compelling portrait of the dissilution of love...moving from expectations to disappointment with liquid smoothness. How many moods and wants seem to dissolve into nothingness...yet they remain there...somewhere.

A very thoughtful piece...

Daniel

[Leran Vakem]

A very well thought out piece this, the imagery is very clear to me. The emotions in these words are real and from the heart, just a pity it had to end.
Leran Vakem

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

Perfectly written emotion well felt

[Adela Muresan]

Beautiful.
I'll admit the first three lines seemed a little choppy, but the rest is perfect.
You had some idea with the tears colliding, and the vortex and bla bla until the last line =).

I sometimes think that we all form a world of broken people, but yet again I see us as just a pack of fools waiting for miracoles, when we are suppose to make them.
*****Poem.

A.M.