I WANTED A DROP

I WANTED A DROP

A Poem by Shabeeh Haider


I wanted a drop you, sent me the sea,

I asked for a leaf, you gave me the tree.

I asked for some hope, you sent me a dream,

To bathe in your love, you sent me a stream.

 

I asked for a rose, you showed me your smile,

I took a small step, you moved back a mile.

I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,

I wanted to write, you sent me the pain.


© 2017 Shabeeh Haider



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You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah



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Wonderfully expressive phrases.
Relatable as well.
When you wish for something good, you always get the best.

Well structured!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

9 Months Ago

Tazeen, thank you for your insight and your kind words
Such gently chosen words, such finely phrased threads of thought. In all honesty, having read your poem twice, still can't decide if you're talking of a love.. or of the love of poetry. Maybe tis both.. one to honour the other. Whatever, why ever.. this is more than worthy of a third read, Shabeeh!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

9 Months Ago

Such wonderful words from you Emmajoy. Thank you for this honor.
Yes, it is a little both of .. read more
Very beautiful..............

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

9 Months Ago

Thank you Farmgirl
What a way to thank our pain giver Sir!
I took a small step, you moved a mile back, some people do this, Haider Ji, I loved the paradox And anti paradox you have brought out in some of the verses. I wanted to write, you gave the pain. It says all.
A strong emotion brought out using light and very touching verses! An amazing one for me, Sir. Thank you for sharing..

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

9 Months Ago

Bala, thank you for taking the time to stop by.
Great poem Shabeeh. Especially the last line.
Only through pain can you write the story.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

9 Months Ago

Paul, thank you for your kind words.
I like the line I took a small step...you moved back a mile.... I wanted to write you sent me pain.... :) guess whatever we asked for we got ....our final wish to write always stays granted :) ....each word of yours hold true..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Yes, Ria. That's what you had reviewed in an earlier poem (the pain keeps the writers alive). Gues.. read more
very powerful my dear as I read your work I always feel the emotion in them which is a great trait the structure needs work though. I have come to expect very powerful emotional messages from you, I hope i will continue to see that as i do here we all write what we feel it is our muse it is the ink in our wells if we did not have something to move us we would not have anything to write about.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Raylene, You have said it so well. it is the ink in our wells and if we did not have something to mo.. read more
Raylene

1 Year Ago

Anytime dear if I may call you that I support all writers
Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Sweet of you
We have a lot in common, it would seem. I enjoyed this piece. You actually pay attention to the rhythm of your writing. This piece was great.
...Misty

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Misty, Rhyme and rhythm is most important for me. I will look up your writing. Nice to have things c.. read more
M. L. F.

1 Year Ago

I am in complete agreement with you there.. If you read it aloud and it sounds awful, go back and do.. read more
Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

The pleasure is mine
I like this you really have a talent for writing. The simplicity of this is easy for anyone to understand.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your kind words, wisemorie
wisemorie

1 Year Ago

You're welcome
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it's really awesome... usually my writings are of this type.. and I believe, the only good thing about pain is it produces excellent poetry... I know, about your writings - they are sometimes yours and sometimes others' experiences... I truly am mad for your poems...they inspire a lot... and mostly touch my heart cause most of the time they are related to me... keep writing the best ones...
Anindita

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Your words mean a lot Anindita. I am glad my poetry inspires you and touches your heart.
Your.. read more

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Writing poetry is my passion. I have been writing since I was 10 years of age. I love the poets of the Romantic Era and am very particular about rhyme, meter and balance. I have also written many Gha.. more..

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