YOUR EMBRACE

As the clouds drift up above,
The sky embraces them with love.


The rain drops falling on the sand,
Gently touch the thirsty land.


 The shore embraces them with glee.
The waves that rise up from the sea.


The mighty sun spreads out its rays,
And takes the Earth in its embrace.


My empty soul lets out a sigh,
O hug me, hold me till I die.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Interesting set of couplets, each with something giving & something else receiving . . . I like such parallels & uniformity from stanza to stanza. Your various give & take scenarios are well-chosen to go together in a harmonious way, with the final couplet being a bit of a departure for emphasis. Clearly the narrator longs for a give & take scenario, too, but his/her sigh just goes out into the ether. The subtlety is very nice.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I like the way that you have analyzed this poem and you have really understood the thought behind the last couplet.
Thank you for taking the time to read this poem and for sharing your wonderful thoughts on it.

[Miss Sharon]

So beautifully written my friend with a graceful touch of nature's awe. I love it! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you liked it. Thank you for your kind words.

[Jon Roggie]

Open your arms. The world is waiting for you.
Nice write.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Jon, thank you

[Lydia Shutter]

Your appreciation for the world we live in and your love of nature come through in this one, Shabeeh. Good rhyming. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

Lydia, thank you for your kind words.

[Valentine]

Very nice write. Thank you for reading mine as now I have found you and your writes. Valentine

[Shabeeh Haider]

I was fortunate to read your poem. Thank you for dropping by and it's wonderful to have met you.

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured Shabeeh. Such a simple statement, yet it intricately weaves all our emotions into something we try to capture in words, yet fall short. You have excelled in creating a piece, much more than the sum of its parts. Superb.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Nemo, thank you for your kind words

[Paul Bell]

Like the longing Shabeeh.
Takes you away in the distance.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Paul, thank you

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"My empty soul lets out a sigh,
O hug me, hold me till I die."
Beautiful lines! Nice reading it☺

[Shabeeh Haider]

Yumna, thank you for your kind words

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are very welcome! My pleasure ☺

[Shannon]

Using the never ending embraces that happen in our natural world to request that type of forever from a loved one very powerful.

[Shabeeh Haider]

S. Mi, thank you for your kind words

[D Connolly]

This is beautiful! Good job

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you. Glad you liked it.