I AM A BLAZING FIRE

I AM A BLAZING FIRE

A Poem by Shabeeh Haider

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                     I am a blazing fire,

                  You are a ball of snow.

         My flames have made you water

               And now you start to flow.

 

                 You pour onto the fire,

           And douse my flickering flame,

               You wipe out my existence,

               For you are not the same.

 

                 There is no blazing fire,

                There is no ball of snow.

            Just eyes that gaze at nothing

           And from them tear drops flow.



© 2016 Shabeeh Haider



Author's Note

Shabeeh Haider
From my book: PAPER BOATS

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There are many ways to describe how two things don't mix: "fire & ice" . . . "gasoline & match" . . . "oil & water" . . . but this is the most amazing & original way I've ever seen it described. This is so brilliantly described in vivid metaphor that is stretched to the moon & back. I could actually feel the way it feels to (1) snuff someone else out with my personality . . . and (2) be snuffed out myself by someone else's personality. It couldn't be more stark & permanent as you've described it here. Truly one of the best ideas I've seen in your writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Thank you for such wonderful and inspiring words.



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YEs, we do tend to obliterate people sometimes. The secret is just to get on with it. OR retribution, but I think that gets out of hand. MY husband always says 'Don't get mad, get even'. But I beg to disagree

Posted 10 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

10 Months Ago

I guess men will think differently and will try to "Get even".
Women tend to be more compassi.. read more
(eyes that gaze at nothing and from them tear drops flow.) A sad statement that I hope is not autobiographical. Nicely written my friend! ~Sharon




Posted 10 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
No, certainly not autobiographical.
I have been blessed.. read more
Miss Sharon

10 Months Ago

That makes two of us!! ~Sharon
Shabeeh Haider

10 Months Ago

May you always be blessed
Kudos for this thought, Sir.
Fire and snow are never meant to be together.
At the end only void will be left.

Brilliant poem, sir.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

11 Months Ago

Gorthi, thank you for stopping by and leaving your very valuable comment.
You Are so correct... read more
What a beautiful write Haider ji! Kudos to your creativity! I liked the irony of the fact.
It's metaphorical effect leaves one awestruck.
To lose existence in the hands of one's own creation can be painful or blissful depending upon the perspective. Those tear drops tell the agony..
Thank you for sharing this beautiful word craft...

Posted 12 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

12 Months Ago

Bala thank you for your wonderful review. At times you lose it all even after having succeeded.
Bala Gorthi

12 Months Ago

Very rightly said, Sir!
Chalk and cheese, night and day.. the coming and going, the ifs and but? There's a conflicting message in your finely expressed poem. The chemistry is near dangerous yet.. maybe the lack of armour on both sices isn't quite enough? Or on a second reading, is one sided.. but, which side?!

Posted 12 Months Ago


Shabeeh Haider

12 Months Ago

You do have very valid points. Lack of armour, lots of expectations and ultimately both end up losi.. read more
emmajoy

12 Months Ago

We readers interpret in such different ways. The first read can be enigmatic on one hand, obvious on.. read more
Delightful rhyming in this ultra-romantic write. Hints at deep emotion and sensuality. I liked it a lot. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

I am glad you liked it Lydia. Thank you for your kind words.
You are a powerful hunter of perfection and beauty. You capture them with great ease....:)...................

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Sami. I will cherish these words that you have conveyed.
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome muchly...:).................
There are many ways to describe how two things don't mix: "fire & ice" . . . "gasoline & match" . . . "oil & water" . . . but this is the most amazing & original way I've ever seen it described. This is so brilliantly described in vivid metaphor that is stretched to the moon & back. I could actually feel the way it feels to (1) snuff someone else out with my personality . . . and (2) be snuffed out myself by someone else's personality. It couldn't be more stark & permanent as you've described it here. Truly one of the best ideas I've seen in your writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Thank you for such wonderful and inspiring words.
Perfectly captured Shabeeh. Reminiscent of dreams that could have been more and memories that alternative endings were written for but not used.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Certainly not the way a relationship should end. Thank you for your words.
It's more fuel that we need when we are aflame - someone who compliments and increases our glow as well as their own - not one who kils the flame.
Good metaphorical write Shabeeh

Posted 1 Year Ago


Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

I agree Tony. Thank you for your review.
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

Welcome Shabeeh.

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Writing poetry is my passion. I have been writing since I was 10 years of age. I love the poets of the Romantic Era and am very particular about rhyme, meter and balance. I have also written many Gha.. more..

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