In the third stanza "I got up and ran,
Looking for someone to hold"
I didn't really think their was a good flow. You just sorta cut it off. I also did not understand the separation of the stanzas. The end of each stanza needs a period as well. So you have to edit a bit. Other than that I got the meaning and I enjoyed reading it.
In the third stanza "I got up and ran,
Looking for someone to hold"
I didn't really think their was a good flow. You just sorta cut it off. I also did not understand the separation of the stanzas. The end of each stanza needs a period as well. So you have to edit a bit. Other than that I got the meaning and I enjoyed reading it.
this isn't a bad poem but not the best one i've ever read. its a good start! i do have to say that the way you spelled 'tearz' bothered me a bit. once again, this was a very good start and dont stop writing!!
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I'm human. I'm living. I can walk. I eat, and breath and stuff.
Lol, sorry but there's not much about me... Hmm... I'm a girl.. 12 years old! .. more..