My queen.

Imagining my girl who I love as a queen and I can't reach her nor stop thinking of her. And I may get myself in trouble if I flirt with her.

You slaughter me with your eyelashes.

Whenever I see you, I turn into ashes.

Shouldn't I or should I try ?

'Cause your majesty is so high.

I can't find a way to portray you without gettin' lashes.

'Cause you're my only thought.

On drowning you're my lifeboat.

When I'm frozen, you're my warm coat.

Reviews

[Hailey Juliet]

This was sweet and romantic, but also intense with some of the word choices. I loved the first line, absolutely amazing!!!

"You slaughter me with your eyelashes."

It was visceral and thrust the reader into the poem immediately. I also really liked the play with "lashes" later on in the poem, like whipping, like torture, your muse eludes you. Very poetic and excellent use of language. You are quite talented with your English!!

"When I'm frozen, you're my warm coat."

The last line gave me some of that warm and fuzzy feeling, it was incredibly sweet and released alot of the tension built up in the first five lines. Another great piece! Thanks for sharing it:)

Hailey

[lessa (kenzie)]

This is a really good write, enjoyed