Mother, sonnet I

A timeless love.

Mother

Oh Mother, why have you left me on the shores of lonesomeness?

Without you, I amount to nothing.

I miss you, and I miss your bosom’s tenderness.

You protected, you fed, and you were my closest peer.

When I became ill, you healed.

When I crumbled in hopelessness, you stood behind as firm backbone,

For strong you are and steady; I lingered within your fortress, behind your shield.

Forever protective; as a watchful knight that has been sworn.

Seldom, I am strong, without your wholesome feminism.

Oh Mother, I dearly miss your divine presence.

Love you; I do, with undoubted truism.

My heart, you comfort; forever, I feel your essence.

You complete me in every way.

Regardless of age, in your warmth I stay.

Author's Note

Poetry in Shakespeare's sonnet no.1's rhyme scheme, with contemporary language.

Reviews

[Aethereal]

It seems to me that your poem has the same rhyme scheme as Shakespeare's number one sonnet. You also seem to have the same message.

" From fairest creatures we desire increase
That thereby beauty's rose may never die,"

Your mother is "beauty's rose" in Shakespeare's sonnet number one.

[Shane Mohamed]

I have to honor you as a studied scholar and an excellent reader. Thank you.

[Aethereal]

My mother is "beauty's rose" too!

[Shane Mohamed]

I'm sure she is.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yeah, Interpretation from poem: your parents dna created the perfect you, and everybody else envies you and tries to change your mind and they fail because they were fed with wic milk.

[Shane Mohamed]

In a way moreorless...

[Jason Katz]

That is quite unfair. The way I see it, this is simply a man's (quite beautiful) memoriam of his mother. He speaks of his relationship with her, and the large role she played in sculpting him to be the man he is today. A simple salute from a son to his mother, giving her thanks. It is quite touching, really. Nothing sinister, boastful, or spiteful.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

"and everybody else envies you and tries to change your mind

[Shane Mohamed]

I really didn't think of others while writing this. I basically recalled my mother and all that she has done for me as a child and a grown man, and felt that I owed her a great deal.

[Shane Mohamed]

And I respect both of your opinions. Thank you all for reading.

[Jason Katz]

Touching work, something many of us can relate to. Along with being emotionally charged, this piece is quite skillfully written, and a joy to read. Bravo.

[Shane Mohamed]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.