Today

Overcoming depression

Today

Sometimes I sit, with chin against palm,

Wondering what’s to come upon morrow,

And fighting this depression distilled with calm,

But oft find myself lost in thoughts of sorrow,

Oft, I find myself displeased to my dismay;

And my conscience can do nothing but obey

This heartless monster of dissatisfaction at the ratio

Of sand grains against piles of colorless snow.

 

Today I slip from the grips of this smothering grief;

Unwilling to give in to the concept of loss

Of mentality, loss of reality, loss of belief.

I am willing to let go of a dismal past, from which I toss;

Toss and turn in wakeful nights, afraid of the cause

Of the squeamish nightmare, which I awfully dread.

I’ve given in many times before, but hence, I conquer instead.

Author's Note

In the rhyme of A Lover's Complaint.

Reviews

[closed]

one thing universal here

is the fact that we are all tortured artists


great write

-Dream

[nazia]

Wonderful work. any attempt to overcome depression is one more step taken forward towards life,happiness and wisdom...
your expression and understanding of rhythm is appreciable..

[Shane Mohamed]

Thank you for the moral boost Nazia.

[Jamestown]

Fabulous piece of work! So many have this struggle you speak of day in and day
out, and it saddens me. I truly feel for these people that fight to just get through
the day, depression is no joke! I will continue to pray for these
people. That last stanza is brilliant, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Shane Mohamed]

Yes, depression is no joke. Thank you for the review James.

[Sami Khalil]

"I slip from the grips of this smothering grief;
Unwilling to give in to the concept of loss
Of mentality, loss of reality, loss of belief."

The concept of loss, the state of depression and the squeamish nightmares seem part and parcel of our humanity in darkest times. So many things we can't control and so many things slip from our daily grasps. I think if humans did not possess this tunnel vision, we can see things in entirety...Excellent work...:).........................

[Shane Mohamed]

It's a dim fog... and finding one's way out isn't easy. Thank you for this wonderful review Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....

[Will Neill]

Shane, as always great work...can I make a suggestion? ....I have read this a few times and I think if you insert 'the' before 'morrow' makes it flow a bit better. See what you think. But its up to you of course.
Take Care.
Will

[Shane Mohamed]

What's going on Will. I dearly took the note, and yes it would be good if I inserted something before "Morrow." I decided to choose a different word though. Thanks for the heads up. Always a pleasure having you around.

[Will Neill]

I stand corrected, a better choice my friend.
Will

[Shane Mohamed]

No, no. I give you complete credit. I knew it needed something. Thanks for the insight :)

[Roshan Nair]

This struggle is very unique when you talk about it I feel, but I do empathize its gravity and realize we all are in some way in this struggle. I love the way you created the piece and its fluid and straight forward delivery.. cheers

[Shane Mohamed]

Yes, I tried to be as direct forward as I can. Thank you for the support Roshan.

[....................]

Some days the darkness cracks and a little light shines through. On these days we have only a short window to welcome the light before the darkness returns. I am happy you slipped through. I loved the lines "This heartless monster of dissatisfaction at the ratio/Of sand grains against piles of colorless snow." and "Today I slip from the grips of this smothering grief". Good write!

[Shane Mohamed]

Yes, every now and then light glistens through the curtains, but it doesn't happen very often. I wait for those days with sincere patience. Thank you for the review Ledrew.

[....................]

You are welcome sir! - FT

[Rachelle]

I guess the chasms present in our lives are there to make us look into ourselves and grow.

[Shane Mohamed]

I've slipped and fallen in so many of them, that my legs can no longer carry me, but hope carries me through. Thank you Rachelle.

[Rachelle]

Life won't present challenges you can't handle. It's to strengthen you, I guess.... So that you can help others who can't.

[Shane Mohamed]

That is true. In Islam, we are taught that God doesn't test a being beyond his or her means.

[~]

Ahh I am soo happy that "today" the speaker was a conqueror. That the shackles of depression did not manage to steal and kill the hope, the laughter and the smile. No resignation -today.
Great job Shane!!

[Shane Mohamed]

Thank you Skittles. You're always welcomed.