Sentimentality

Sentimentality

A Poem by Shane Mohamed
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When kindness persists.

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Sentimentality

Art thou feeling fair today?

They did you justice not when they called you ugly.

Nefertiti was of no comparison to thine beauty.

They said your hair was closest to tenured garments.

I found it smoother than the finest of silks.

When you spoke: it was as if they had heard an a*s groan,

But to me it sounded as if a mockingbird had sung to the heavens.

They heard you stutter,

But all I heard were repetitions of melodious synonyms.

They said you slouched and dragged as you treaded,

But I said she’s wise to calculate the notion of each step.

They said you reek of must.

All I smelt was thyme and basil and the purest of spices.

Can’t they see the sincerity that lies beneath the age?

For as they mock, upon time, you turn an honest page.


© 2015 Shane Mohamed



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This is a society that has little appreciation for the elderly. Sadness!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

About time someone got it! Good to see you back dear friend :)
THIS is classy...what a caliber of talent you are! I love it!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Kelly. I'm glad you liked it.
I like the way this is written. Such depth.
A good write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Melinda. Glad you liked it.
As your all other works I especially love the way you frame your work.. Just love it.. brilliant and amazing :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

It's nice to know that you're always there with you kind words :) Thanks.
nazia

2 Years Ago

My pleasure :)
This is a gem my friend, bravo! Throwing the two perspectives together
is brilliant, two wave lengths to form one poem, love the fusion, very creative!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you James. I Appreciate it.
I like how you put both perspectives in the poem, it gives it something - not sure what though lol.
Nice piece though. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Hell, I'd tell you what it was, but I don't even know it! Thanks for the review.
GreenEyedPoet

2 Years Ago

Haha gotcha. And you're welcome.
A beautiful piece Shane. She sounds beautiful and wise indeed. I like how you weave the two different perspectives of the same image and am reminded of beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Nice write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Ledrew. Trying to stay positive.
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2 Years Ago

Positive is good my friend.

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Added on March 12, 2015
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Shane Mohamed
Shane Mohamed

Dalton, GA



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Name's Sherif Mohamed, but I tell people to call me Shane, since my name has been mispronounced as "Sheriff" many times. I'm 29. Originally, I'm an artist; I draw and paint, as you can see in my pictu.. more..

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