Gloomy Lens

Gloomy Lens

A Poem by Shane Mohamed
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Of her gloomy lens.

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Gloomy Lens

I cannot seem to see life through your lens:

You see through the eye of the hurricane.

For me: the sun’s always up; the clouds are always clear.

You called me a lame optimist, but why

Don’t you see that your catharsis was what drove you backwards.

I snore when I lay to rest.

Your slumber is oft restless and stumbled.

Your words scathe me;

Nothing but abrasive shards into my tender ego.

I oft find myself keening the blade,

Readying to slit that tongue of yours in half.

You seem to mistake sincerity for pity, and kindness for weakness.

I must depart.

I can no longer endure the nocuous brooding.

If I could foresee what’s to come, I would

See long strands of lonely gray curtaining that gloomy lens of yours.


© 2015 Shane Mohamed



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"restless and stumbled.
Your words scathe me;
Nothing but abrasive shards into my tender ego.
I oft find myself keening the blade,"

Posted 2 Years Ago


It seems some people bring doom and gloom into our lives and others bring a ray of hope. You share with us that dark chapter but with new realizations. An excellent one great poet...:)....

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Yes. We must choose who we befriend wisely. Thank you Sami. Pleasure having you.
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

Pleasure is mine. Welcome muchly...:).....
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What a great poem full of striking contrasts. It seems that the speaker has found a way how to detach themselves from the gloom that the other brings with them. Powerful imagery and livid pain throughout each verse. Wishing to read some happy ones from you soon :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Shane Mohamed

2 Years Ago

Thank you Skittles. Waiting for the sun to shine on my end.
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2 Years Ago

Biiiiig smiles and hug for you!! Joining in your wishes!!
Sounds like you've misplaced the muse in a storm that has somehow fogged the lens through which you experience her experiences. Fear not, however, for soon the sun will shine to quell the wind and wipe the fog from the "Gloomy lens".

Posted 2 Years Ago


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2 Years Ago

Well, you've written this piece haven;t you? :)
SleeplessVolcano

2 Years Ago

Mmmm....forgive me for sounding pessimistic, but another's gloomy lens is not likely to change spont.. read more
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2 Years Ago

ohhh it's The Cataracs :):)

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Shane Mohamed
Shane Mohamed

Dalton, GA



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Name's Sherif Mohamed, but I tell people to call me Shane, since my name has been mispronounced as "Sheriff" many times. I'm 29. Originally, I'm an artist; I draw and paint, as you can see in my pictu.. more..

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