The gloomy brother

This poem is about when I was sitting to see the beauty of nature I observed that the brothers(clouds)who are in the grief of loosing their sister (nature) were shouting and expressing their grief.

When I sat near my windowpane,
I heard clouds roaring,
And pouring tears called rain,
The gloomy clouds were crying,
In the grief of there sister.
Who was colorless but not showing,
Who was dark but still glowing.

She was stifling with violence,
With a hope of being just like before,
But its too late,
Now she has to live in sore.
Apes period has gone, and Humen are here,
Who destroyed there sister, without any care.

They left nothing, but a good clue,
When Earth was green and sky was blue.
There sky is roaring and Earth is crying,
And here these Humen are destroying and enjoying...

Author's Note

Please ignore all grammar and spelling mistakes. What you think which is the best line ?

Reviews

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I liked the first two lines.
I think for someone so young, and who probably does not speak English as their first language, you are doing well. Keep at it kiddo.

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Ivy Pepper for reading and reviewing my poem. I really get cheered up with these types of reviews...

[Dust That Drifts Throug..]

This poem captures the tone and setting beautifully. I really love the first stanza
¨When I sat near my windowpane,
I heard clouds roaring,
And pouring tears called rain,
The gloomy clouds were crying,
In the grief of there sister.
Who was colorless but not showing,
Who was dark but still glowing.¨

[Shasha]

Thank you, thank you very much willowwaldgrave...

[Soumya Deouskar]

Great poem written! Its quite true that we humans are really turning into demons and you have expressed this message into magnificent words! The best line was
"She was stifling wiith violence......................"
Great poem! Keep crafting words!

[Shasha]

Thanks for your review Blank_futunes. I'll remember your points.

[Blank_fortunes]

I don't want to say that I liked one line more than the other in this one; however, Your first stanza was powerful with imagery. I felt like you held back in the second and third not that they were bad it's just by reading the first as your audience I know where you are able to take me. So I builded up an expectation for the following stanzas. Good work though your the Author It's your Journey take us where ever you want us to go. Keep up the good work.