Hand in Hand

Hand in hand

A kite between

High above

A growing tree

Hand in hand

The awkward phase

Little teasing

Cheeks ablaze

Hand in hand

Bound by gold

Wedded now

As they grow old

Hand in hand

Withered beauty

But love thrives

As if their duty

Heart to heart

Hand to stone

Though he wishes

Is still alone

Soul to soul

As tree does perish

Two graves intwine

From a love once cherished

Author's Note

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[BLBrown]

Fantastic job!!! I say this every time but I cannot believe you are 13 and writing like this. So beautiful. The rhyme flows nicely and I love the structure...easy to read and take in. This circle of life poem is among your best I think!

I would only make one change, or not if you wanted another meaning

"From a love once cherished"
to
"Again now cherished"

Just to consider, closing the circle.

Very good job!! Congrats

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate it. You have no idea how much this means to me. I'll consider it, thank you. :)

[BLBrown]

No problem! I love to read your pieces...but I think you are 13 writing on 30!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Ha ha, well hopefully I don't look it! :)

[V.J.C.]

enjoyed this piece.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

:)

[Forever Hidden]

I don't know what to say..

" Thinks "

Beautiful!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thank you, it means a lot. : )

[Forever Hidden]

Anytime dear!

[Leslie Philibert]

We do ! A poem that desrves all the credit it has become, light but full of meaning and poetic observation, good work.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

I'm glad. Thanks so much for the review.

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like the way you expressed your feelings, and take it out on this structure.
It flows well and it was very fun to read. Great job for 13.
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[writingcrazy55555]

What an excellent poem! And nice portrayal of the picture! Nice work!

[MoriartyMesa]

Very enjoyable, very charming, enjoyed the style

[DA]

Great Job... I love the style and the rhyme :) Keep it up!!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I like the rhythm in this poem, and you've managed to portray the emotions of the theme perfectly.
Good job!

[Cole Hayley]

I saw that picture along time ago and I always wanted to write a piece about it, you seemed to do exactly that here, beautiful.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

:) Thanks, it means a lot. I thought it was really fun, maybe you should give it a shot. If you do I'll be sure to check it out.