Crystallized Water

I can feel the droplets pass through me,

Through my body, through my soul,

Pellets of water slicing into my very being,

Erasing the memories I hold so dear

The ones I wish not to forget,

They race away with the rain,

Forming puddles around my feet;

Melted dreams

Smudging the pencil marks,
And the black ink bleeds,

It rips the flimsy lined paper,
Of my mind

And the pearls,

The crystallized water,

Leaves a permanent imprint,
Of the memories I so wish to forget

Reviews

[Monica]

This is a great write! It's very well written and flows beautifully.

"Forming puddles around my feet;
Melted dreams"

...i love every line, start to finish, but this stands out to me...well done!

[Buniheart]

I can fill the very skeleton of your poem - its delicateness as seen in the lines
'smudging the pencil marks,
and the black ink bleeds'

I love the softness of the 'flimsy lined paper'. I love this poem

[Gabriella]

I really like this poem!! It's very good!!

[JustLorry]

Nicely done.great ending.