Imminent - Edited 2

Imminent - Edited 2

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer
"

I stand here, hands on my hips...

"
I stand here,
Hands on my hips,
Gazing up at the clouds,
The bright blue sky,
The dazzling sun,
I listen to the birds,
Their quiet song merging
With the rushing wind,
Dandelions at my feet,
Swaying in the harsh breeze,
A chill runs up my spine,
The air around me cools,
As more clouds enter the scene,
Blocking out the sun's light,
Darkening the valley
And everything inside it,
The wind blows stronger,
Sending dandelion fluff
Spinning uncontrollably through the air,
The birds' song stops,
And they take to their wings,
Struggling to free themselves
Of the tangled tree branches,
I watch a plume of smoke,
Rise from the ground on the horizon,
It levels out and begins to move,
Tumbling over itself at a slow crawl,
Eating up everything
That dares cross its path,
Becoming larger,
Thicker,
Faster
With every jagged movement,
Across the uneven ground,
It's a thick mass of agony,
A spiraling whirlwind of desperation,
A whispered torment,
I flick the wisps of hair from my face,
Spinning around with my arms spread wide,
Balancing in the wind,
And I run
I run from the ever disappearing valley,
From the darkening smog,
But it catches up;
An overwhelming sense of despair,
I crash to the ground,
Clawing at loose rocks,
Grabbing at dry earth,
I take hold of a patch of grass,
Clench it tight in my fist,
A sliver of hope,
Makes its way into the dread
The despair,
The anguish,
I pull on the grass,
Try to get to my feet,
And these single green blades,
That I clasp in my hands,
Turn to a liquid,
Seep through my hands,
And hit the ground
With a sizzling hiss,
Now I'm completely engulfed,
Overwhelmed by the unearthly substance,
As dirt is kicked up,
Strewn around,
Controlled by an impetuous,
Contaminated fog,
All hope vanishes,
Fading into the smog
Like a tiny flame
Flickering from existence
The darkness surrounds me,
Creeps into my soul,
Slicing through my very being,
Coursing through my veins
Filling every nook,
Every cranny,
Of my mind -
Darkness

© 2012 SheActsLikeSummer


Author's Note

SheActsLikeSummer
Okay, I'll probably edit more later, but a special episode of Phineas and Ferb is on. :P

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DA
So much imagination. I actually felt all that! Great poem... Tell me when you edit it again :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Ha ha, thanks. I was hoping I didn't have to, but because it's for school, I'm going to look over it.. read more
Powerful read. Like an out of control dream where nothing goes your way. Gripping words.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Well done! I can feel fear in this one. Whatever the situation is based on it sounds fearful and hard.

I congratulate you, this time I have no criticisms.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on May 25, 2012
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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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