INSATIABLE

INSATIABLE

A Poem by TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror
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" I am intrigued like a moth to a flame "

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   the need to cross over lines

no hands on the steering wheel

the sharpest knife in the drawer

that’s where I wrote your number

love that white knuckle grip

enhances the blood splatter

my silhouette breaks the pattern

slipping past wicked

sporting sinister head to toe

face shadowed in a hoodie

breadcrumbs from a new honey

a fork in the road, indeed

perfect setting for a feast of thieves

the dining is divine

anticipation appetizer

catching fire to a grand desire

cold sweat against the brow

a heartbeat in a chase and prowl

fuels the need to free a hunter

as a girl paces the floor

longing for my boy next door

fresh blood trickling down my arms

requires no attention

my new sweet has choosen

he will be mine only

pitch black remembers fondly

untwisting every light bulb

part of my game

time to play

his scent still lingers

waking intrigue like a moth to a flame

screams in a blaze

insisting that I cut

that I set them free

their frightful eyes

trapped by my beautiful webs

dreaming darker

embracing the bad seed

escaped from a dying breed

with a psychopath need

drowning in the land of milk and honey


Terry D'Arcy-Ryan

 

                                                                 

© 2018 TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror


Author's Note

TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror
* A very special thanks to "Caffeinated me" for editing and once again pulling me in off the ledge. It really is a beautiful view. Thank you for reading and God Bless

Sheer Terror

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Beautiful phpto and tempting/wonderful words. I had to read again. The words were alive and meaningful. Thank you my friend for sharing poem. I liked this one.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


Nice!! I can't say enough!

Posted 6 Years Ago


I'll start off by saying that I like the images you included with this piece. They add to it.

Anyway, onwards to the review! I'll start with the positives. For starters, you paint some good imagery here, which definitely does augment the poem's menacing vibe.

However, there are a few things that don't feel quite right with this. One, the fragmented stylization of the writing is too prevalent here for this to be as impactful as it could be. Also, that same fragmented style makes it hard for readers to easily follow along with what you're trying to convey sometimes, especially in the middle portion of the poem.

To reiterate, your poem displays some nice imagery, which helps to generate the lyrical atmosphere you desired, but in your apparent effort to keep the lines concise, your poem's grammar and fluent story-telling has suffered slightly. I hope my review is of some help. Good luck, and keep on writing! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

Dan, I do appreciate your in depth review. I like to write in the fragmented, jumping quickly to the.. read more
DoormanDan

6 Years Ago

No problem, Sheer Terror. My only suggestion is just focus more on coherence and making sense. Do .. read more
TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

Some of my stuff I write and I stay focused with it turns out fine. I am going to work on this one a.. read more
nice job. a devilish, daring write that speaks of pushing the envelope, testing limits and living on the edge. careful though, play with fire and get burned. there is a lot to digest in this. not for the faint of heart. thrillseekers must be handled carefully like t.n.t. ...

Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

Pete, as I never test the limits, I set them. Nothing like the view from the extreme edge, wanted by.. read more
i particularly enjoy the short halting lines. If they are assertive enough they do just fine on their own without periods or commas. Some folks would say it's just lazy, I think it's quite the oppositte.

On the content not technical; I've hurt myself too. Like a moth to a white hot bulb, nothing comes of it for more than a few moments. If you live long enough, consciousness becomes painful for all of us regardless. (there's a light at the end of tunnel... and s**t, I swear to god ((and s**t)))

Anyway, I enjoyed this.


Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

I am always thrilled when a writer such as yourself give such a detailed review. Thank you
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You and I really are connected.we're both drawn to the ledge.and your picture is much more captivating than mine.even though it's considered weak to give up on life I still believe it takes courage to climb up to the ledge in the first place

Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

The ledge comes with a Spectacular view and a mesmerizing temptation luring you to stay in the wake .. read more
we are drawn to death like a bee to honey...or caught up in the drama like a fly in a web...yelling "help me" even though we flew into it of our own accord.
deep, dark write...shades of Sexton.
j.

Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

Of our own accord, no truer words have been spoken. Thank you for reading and leaving a review.
read more
The view is stunning.
If this is what coffee does do you. I want in.
Superb lines running through this dark write.
Come into my parlour says the spider to the fly.
I'm going in, and i know what happens.
Is this why us guys are dumb.
How does she kill them.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Paul Bell

6 Years Ago

I spent a lot of years hiding in the dark. Glad I never met you. The night can be a comfort. Once yo.. read more
TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

The images of heaven and hell have been imprinted in our brain through a lifetime of conditioning. .. read more
Paul Bell

6 Years Ago

Must be why i gave up religion.
a deep write terry,emotional,border line suicideal,crumbs from a new love,just enough to keep you hanging on,great images

Posted 6 Years Ago


TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

6 Years Ago

Wordman, I am always happy to see review and I am glad you like it. You Rock !!

Sheer.. read more
 wordman

6 Years Ago

you`re welcome

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Added on January 6, 2018
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TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror
TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror

PHOENIX, AZ



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