I Hate Love

This was written because of a very good friend of mine and me getting together by the end of it we were having cops called on us when we used to be great friends... p.s.....A. this is an acrostic....

I hate the way you look at me like your looking at a toad.

 

 

Hate that you never have an answer to the question you SHOULD know.

Abhor the constant criticism of everything I do,

Taking a backseat to perfect shiney you.

Everything about you makes me want to cringe.

 

 

Leave every word at the door cause if I hear one I'll come unhinged.

Outcomes haven't looked good, in this love affair of ours.

Very, very bad in fact, my heart carries the scars.

Everything has reached its end and it makes me blue.

 

 

I hate love because it's made me hate you.

Author's Note

This is open for reveiws and rating... please tell me what you rat me and why so I can work on my weaknesses.... thanks!

Reviews

[A.Blasphemy]

Quite well done! It feels like you put yourself into your work... which is what I really liked about it. It was cute, despite the hatred. H, L, and E feel a bit awkward though. They seem to throw the flow of just a bit.

Your poem is structured in a way where there are four points of emphasis per line:

I HATE the way
you LOOK at me
like you're LOOKING
at a TOAD

(Caps being the emphasized words)

All other sections of your poem follow that same format.
example:
abHOR the constant CRITisism of EVerything I DO (the emphasis doesn't have to be on an entire word)

H, L, and E, however, break the format. H and E both have 5 points, and L's four points seem like you've tried to cram just a bit too much in. I'm not sure if you meant to do that, since H & E are the opening and closing to the acrostic body, and although I like the idea, I personally don't feel as it if much helps the flow.

Either way, you still did well, and overall the structure doesn't take away to your message. Keep up the good work!

[Lily1111]

A very creative acrostic that was enjoyable to read. I have never explored this form so I am not in a position to critique. It conveyed well your message to your reader. I read the featured review and since I don't know the "point system" I give it a 10. LOL

[S.E.C.]

I know exactly what you mean. Love the last line, ends it nicely.

[Deepshikha]

Hate. Love. So powerful.
I loved the way you put your emotions in to it.
The acrostic format made it even more intriguing to read.
Very nice.

[Rachael]

This is amazing! I love the way you wrote it, and the emotion put into this.
Very nice work! Keep it up! =DD

I really like this poem! I thought you got your message out very clearly! The word hate is so powerful as well as the word love. Very good!

I plan to rate this 100. I loved it!

[Adam Jordan Turner]

That is awesome! Perfect flow, nothing I would change about it. Short and powerful message. Funny how you can use hate to let someone know how much you loved them. I absolutely love this piece, it's one of my favorites of yours. Now this is a Frances piece, well done love, well done!

[Nocturnal illusion]

hate is such a strong word...but the emotion it puts ou in your words rings true...love is a very strong power tht can either rip or mend...I feel sorry for your loss of both a friend and a love....may in the future you find your true happiness