Color

He has color

Hiding beneath his skin

So bright

I can almost discern it

Shifting and changing

Greens and blues and hues

Of purple

Sunny gold splashing stunningly

Beside rose pink

Beside turquoise

Beside his apple vivid heart.

How can the murkey

Grays, blacks, browns

The dull, lusterless dried blood red

Beneath my skin

Ever combine

Brilliantly

With his?

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: Very vivid description! I like the use of colors to describe, instead of words or objects. And the poem flows rather well itself, despite the lack of a rhyme scheme. I like the idea behind it; two totally different people coming together, trying to work out differences. At least, that's what I got from it. And I like the ending question.

Cons: None.

Overall: This is a pretty poem, with a good idea behind it that is conveyed quite well.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is nice! I like how you tie the poem together, but I've no doubt you have brilliant colors of your own.

[.shalynn.009.]

Great poem.

"How can the murkey
Grays, blacks, browns
The dull, lusterless dried blood red
Beneath my skin
Ever combine" This speaks so much for the way most people feel. You speak, to me, Shelby. You speak to me.

[Alicia™]

I love this so much! It shows that a person can have so much beneath the skin. I actually wrote something similar to this a while back - http://www.alicialoh.com/2010/06/rainbow-colored-mind_23.html . It's nice to see that someone else has felt the same way, too.