Lying underneath the twilight moon

An eclipse of the mind

Eyes shining like a celestial being

Her "Come hither" smile

All an entrancing beauty

Of this Angel in my arms

 

A shimmering moonlight

Casts over our embrace

As I gaze into the eyes of pure love

These eyes that entrance my soul

As we lie beneath the twilight moon

Reviews

[Donald Olds]

I feel like there should've been more. But I also understand that by sometimes adding more than what's needed can ruin a poem.

[Tasha]

Beautiful!
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Calypso]

Very descriptive, beautifully written.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the description. Your words took me to a good place. It is nice to have time with a love to watch the moon and the stars. Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sarah Morgan]

This makes me want to go out and seriously watch the moon with my love. Now a days romance is from what I see 'dead' and Id really love it for people to open up instead of being so negative about how they feel. I like this piece for it's kind of sexy style - it really gives you a love-struck feeling. Great write!

[Alex Walters]

A lot of people nowadays think that you have to rhyme to make a good poem. (I use rhymes, but that's my personal style choice.) You showed here that you don't need any of those to make a great piece. Well done.

[Commit it then to the f..]

This is so beautiful and sweet. I LOVE IT c:

[BlueberryKisses]

This is beautiful Sherb! I love the line 'As I gazed into the eyes of pure love' :3 so sweet, great write x

[Aidz]

Bloody good scribe, enjoyed it

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sooo romantic..