Incommunicado

...the frustration of being out of touch.

Tell me I'm not dead,
And I'll prove to you that, now, I'm just a pack of lead.
Do you think I'm still living?
When in fact all I do is exist by breathing.

The life in me died sometimes ago,
When I couldn't get new info on how to build a lego.
I breathe but live not,
For my whole being seem to account for naught.

I've occupied a space all this while,
But at the same time, my existence has been a lie.
One of the few thing still 'human' in me is that I crave for data,
Information on happenings in the world, including the activities of lava.

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

The lines you created are very intriguing indeed, but I still feel like this could use a bit of improvement. "While" and "lie" just don't seem to rhyme, well, to most people I've met anyways. Otherwise, you've said some pretty interesting things with this. Keep it up!