tangerine moon champagne ensemble

fixated on a lesson in magnificence

inspiring the act of dance and praise

zenith of visual experience

generous earthly amazement from saving grace

and I am the party of awe frozen one position

abducted by the beauty imprisoned in trance

continued in the fear of insignificance…too much of a grandiose thing

no coming back from this rising…a creative monument

levels of blushing vitality for the atmosphere

more than meager eyes could ask to witness

who will bring me back to the physical form transcended

able to touchdown verdant masses again

this migratory painting I have submitted

pondering… committing it’s realism to a mental frame for infinity…

as I live travel with me while minutes unfold

spreading my arms… waving hand melancholy

anticipating the next tangerine moon

in a champagne setting

 

 

Reviews

[WritersRankings]

Another one that would do well in the Tournament. Clean format, spicy title, classic ending. No full frothy eccentric showboating, transcendent vocabulary. Not too bubbly:

"abducted by the beauty imprisoned in trance" - genius

[Blue]

The wordplay is amazing! This is simply beautiful!!!

[Shirlena]

Thank you so very kindly Ms. Arzel :)

[cycy]

i love that your poetry always gets me thinking deeply Shirlena. that's a great thing and this poem was very beautifully written and well composed, well done dear. you are a very talented and unique writer, keep writing hey.

[Shirlena]

Thank you cycy...it's hard for me to tame it:).

[s y e]

Your title had me, Shirlena. I loved this one, definitely a strong, vivid poem that nearly blew me away. :) Loved the last two lines, wonderful poem.

[Shirlena]

Thank you for reading Nh.

[Wuji]

I like the celebrative tone of this! You display a crisp originality. Along with your usual peculiar layer of surrealism:

1. this migratory painting I have submitted
pondering… committing it’s realism to a mental frame for infinity…

It's all about the journey, isn't it!

[Shirlena]

Isn't though :)? You supposed to be resting but thanks for raising yourself to read me love.

[Lyn Anderson]

Hi there. I loved this poem, and by way of introduction, I mean you no harm. I am the errant apostrophe hunter, and most people take it in stride as just me. So that said, this wonderful, delightful poem, lush in imagery and smooth in rhythm, has an apostrophe on the possessive its. (its realism). Nice to meet you.

[Shirlena]

Nice to meet you as too KL...no harm taken. I appreciate your giving your attention to my writing. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

"I have submitted

pondering… committing it’s realism to a mental frame for infinity…

as I live travel with me while minutes unfold

spreading my arms… waving hand melancholy"

Pondering in melancholy waving to the universe to stop this sadness while the minutes unfold fear of insignificance but keeping till the end ensemble of creative moments and groups of lovers.
Excellent...:)...................

[Shirlena]

Thank you Sam. Sunsets are my favorite gift from nature.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I do love them too...You are welcome...:)........................

[Sami Khalil]

In my library...:)..................

[Frieda P]

Holy smokes, I love this...the title drew me in and it was well worth the price of admission, just got better to infinity, love the finale, it's killer. Going into my favorites toot sweet! Stellar read.

100 champagn'd tangerine moons

[Shirlena]

Thank you so much and the feeling is definitely mutual. Thank you for becoming a friend Frieda. I'm going to enjoy reading your poetry.

[Frieda P]

Oh the pleasure was all mine, this is truly exquisite, nice to meet you Shirlena.