The Beat

The Beat

A Chapter by Shy Joe
"

You take my hand. I follow your jaunt.

"
succulent
  served vocals;
        fuel to the heart-

rhythmatic motions
perpetualate,
                      me
                                to you
steps of synchroic poetry
written body gesticulations,
                                 your twirl,
             your words

                             you're music





© 2017 Shy Joe



Author's Note

Shy Joe
I made up three words as they are not in the English language. "Rhythmatic, perpetualate, and synchroic ". I just thought it sounded better read. I would like your thoughts on this. If there are better substitutes, I would like to hear about it. I am very open and take no offense of criticism toward any of my writings.

I am not trying to change language. I'm just trying to make words dance.

EDIT - I have changed the structure on this due to the advice from a fellow writer on Reddit. - "ParadiseEngineer" I think it was a fantastic idea and credit is deserved where it is due.

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Very inspiring, i like how you made your own words
and i like the music alot

Chapeau

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ha, yes... i did wonder at those made up words. thank you for explaining. the poem's rhythm flows beautifully with the music, and the words practically dance on the tongue

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've made words danced. I like this poem, very. You made the words danced as you limned music. Tyfs!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a song to the soul. there is power in words and you admirably enhanced them to make them even deeper. song, poetry and dancing - all beautiful art forms that you married together so well.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 18, 2017
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