The Beat

The Beat

A Chapter by Shy Joe
"

You take my hand. I follow your jaunt.

"
succulent
  served vocals;
        fuel to the heart-

rhythmatic motions
perpetualate,
                      me
                                to you
steps of synchroic poetry
written body gesticulations,
                                 your twirl,
             your words

                             you're music





© 2017 Shy Joe



Author's Note

Shy Joe
I made up three words as they are not in the English language. "Rhythmatic, perpetualate, and synchroic ". I just thought it sounded better read. I would like your thoughts on this. If there are better substitutes, I would like to hear about it. I am very open and take no offense of criticism toward any of my writings.

I am not trying to change language. I'm just trying to make words dance.

EDIT - I have changed the structure on this due to the advice from a fellow writer on Reddit. - "ParadiseEngineer" I think it was a fantastic idea and credit is deserved where it is due.

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Very inspiring, i like how you made your own words
and i like the music alot

Chapeau

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ha, yes... i did wonder at those made up words. thank you for explaining. the poem's rhythm flows beautifully with the music, and the words practically dance on the tongue

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've made words danced. I like this poem, very. You made the words danced as you limned music. Tyfs!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a song to the soul. there is power in words and you admirably enhanced them to make them even deeper. song, poetry and dancing - all beautiful art forms that you married together so well.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 18, 2017
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