You are *You*

You are *You*

A Poem by Silmara McGarry




You are like diamonds in the light, always shining so bright;
You are the breath of a new life, In a world so tight;
You are the everlasting love one can hope to find, 
In days where love means no more than the selfishness of life;
You are the peaceful mountain where my body lay down at peace,
together with the happiness of my mind!

© 2016 Silmara McGarry



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Another lovely poem with great imagination of beloved for the lover. I love the metaphors that you have used in the poem and also the rhymes. Every line is touching to a reader's heart. a beautiful love poem in short and few words. I enjoy it. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

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szhzia

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

8 Months Ago

Much appreciated truly! Thanks a million, Zia ;-)
Take care.
:-)
Sil
SZHZIA

8 Months Ago

It is my pleasure and you are welcome as always. ;-) zia



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I love the way you capture emotion in your words. I feel so moved when I read your work, it's quite remarkable. Thank You.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

6 Months Ago

You are so kind, Anna! Many thanks for appreciating my work and for your wonderful review!
Anna Moore

6 Months Ago

You're welcome. If you might have the time to review some of my writing then please feel free to do .. read more
Silmara McGarry

6 Months Ago

I already did :-) And really enjoy it!!!
Another lovely poem with great imagination of beloved for the lover. I love the metaphors that you have used in the poem and also the rhymes. Every line is touching to a reader's heart. a beautiful love poem in short and few words. I enjoy it. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Best
szhzia

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

8 Months Ago

Much appreciated truly! Thanks a million, Zia ;-)
Take care.
:-)
Sil
SZHZIA

8 Months Ago

It is my pleasure and you are welcome as always. ;-) zia
Oh God, another brilliant poem. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

9 Months Ago

So kind of you, Lyla :-) Many thanks indeed!
This is a nice statement describing many lovely details about why another person is special. Your writing is well done and your ideas are interesting. My only drawback is that some of the phrases you use are ones that are used a lot in poetry: "diamonds in the light" . . . "breath of new life" . . . "everlasting love" . . . "peaceful mountain" . . . and again "lay down at peace" -- using the same word (peaceful/peace) over again, try to find a different way to say it.

I encourage you to dig deep and find new ways to say these same old things that are said over & over in millions of love poems. SHOW me the details of why this other person means so much to you. One aspect of diamonds that makes them so special is the way the light reflects into a prism of colors . . . otherwise it would just be a piece of cut glass. Take advantage of such vivid details to convey how a diamond is special in the same way the beloved is special. Instead of a peaceful mountain, dig deep and find new words everybody is not in the habit of using . . . like tranquil mountain or mesmerizing mountain . . . this is how to write a love poem that stands out with originality, instead of being same-ole-same-old.

Sorry for the tough love, but your writing is too good to settle for mundane descriptions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Silmara McGarry

1 Year Ago

It was one of my first poems. I wrote it in less then 10 min., it come out of nowhere, I just wanted.. read more
and this called... true love where only the real peace of heart, & the balanced state of mindfulness be together found... at peek of light. very deep & artistic poetry you've come up with. nice imagery here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

1 Year Ago

Thanks indeed for reading and your kind lovely review! I really appreciated :-)

All t.. read more
Indeed in this materialistic world, it is really difficult to find true love. But if one finds it, then its the best thing that he / she could have. It will give him/ her strength and hope. It will give him / her a reason to smile.

This is another simple yet elegant poem. Goo job :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


A heart which has the love that doesn't fear any other force of this world, and which gives his/her beloved a place to feel secure... When someone has this much love in his/her heart, nothing can cause harm to that person... It is a very joyful write of love... Passionate and magnificent...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

1 Year Ago

Perfect words Dhiman. Beautiful are all hearts that does not fear the force of love.Thanks a million.. read more

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Silmara McGarry
Silmara McGarry

May we find our souls floating in the peaceful waters of it's original place. SM, United Kingdom



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I often try to see the world with angels eyes... To leave people better then I found them, even if is just with a smile... I Love God above all... Simple love poems are my favourite... Most of wha.. more..

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