*YOU*

*YOU*

A Poem by Silmara McGarry


You are like diamonds of golden light,

Always shining so bright.

You are fresh breath of a new life,

In a world so tight.

You are sweet everlasting love

one can hope to find,

In days where love means no

more than blind selfishness of life,

You are the peaceful mountain

where my body lay down at peace

together with the happiness of my mind.

 








© 2017 Silmara McGarry



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Another lovely poem with great imagination of beloved for the lover. I love the metaphors that you have used in the poem and also the rhymes. Every line is touching to a reader's heart. a beautiful love poem in short and few words. I enjoy it. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Best
szhzia

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

10 Months Ago

Much appreciated truly! Thanks a million, Zia ;-)
Take care.
:-)
Sil
SZHZIA

10 Months Ago

It is my pleasure and you are welcome as always. ;-) zia



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That is very refreshing poetry..with rhyming..really meaningful...very nice...

Posted 4 Minutes Ago


To compare someone in such a way shows great love. Nice poem Sil.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

1 Week Ago

Indeed ;-) Thank you so much!!!
A beautifully written puece here..lifting love up to a higher realm.

.nicely done

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

1 Week Ago

So kind of you for reading, Fran :-) Many thanks for the sweet review!
Oh! I so dearly love this! because it rises to that spiritual love that not all can feel it, beautiful images, the first one captured the eyes along the photo, Your style is that simple wonderful one that all can enjoy reading!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

2 Weeks Ago

So kind of you to read and such sweet review. Many thanks indeed...What a beautiful name *Light*
Beautiful love poem. I enjoyed the entirety and strangely I took something more spiritual away in meaning.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much! I can understand perfectly what you mean about the spiritual feeling...God :-)
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Sky
In days where love means no more than the selfishness of life; wish days like those should never end from anyone's life. Wonderful prose :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

2 Weeks Ago

Ohhhh... Thank you so very much!!!!!!! :-)
Sky

2 Weeks Ago

Welcome so very much friend :)
I love the way you capture emotion in your words. I feel so moved when I read your work, it's quite remarkable. Thank You.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

8 Months Ago

You are so kind, Anna! Many thanks for appreciating my work and for your wonderful review!
Anna Moore

8 Months Ago

You're welcome. If you might have the time to review some of my writing then please feel free to do .. read more
Silmara McGarry

8 Months Ago

I already did :-) And really enjoy it!!!
Another lovely poem with great imagination of beloved for the lover. I love the metaphors that you have used in the poem and also the rhymes. Every line is touching to a reader's heart. a beautiful love poem in short and few words. I enjoy it. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Best
szhzia

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

10 Months Ago

Much appreciated truly! Thanks a million, Zia ;-)
Take care.
:-)
Sil
SZHZIA

10 Months Ago

It is my pleasure and you are welcome as always. ;-) zia
Oh God, another brilliant poem. :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silmara McGarry

10 Months Ago

So kind of you, Lyla :-) Many thanks indeed!
This is a nice statement describing many lovely details about why another person is special. Your writing is well done and your ideas are interesting. My only drawback is that some of the phrases you use are ones that are used a lot in poetry: "diamonds in the light" . . . "breath of new life" . . . "everlasting love" . . . "peaceful mountain" . . . and again "lay down at peace" -- using the same word (peaceful/peace) over again, try to find a different way to say it.

I encourage you to dig deep and find new ways to say these same old things that are said over & over in millions of love poems. SHOW me the details of why this other person means so much to you. One aspect of diamonds that makes them so special is the way the light reflects into a prism of colors . . . otherwise it would just be a piece of cut glass. Take advantage of such vivid details to convey how a diamond is special in the same way the beloved is special. Instead of a peaceful mountain, dig deep and find new words everybody is not in the habit of using . . . like tranquil mountain or mesmerizing mountain . . . this is how to write a love poem that stands out with originality, instead of being same-ole-same-old.

Sorry for the tough love, but your writing is too good to settle for mundane descriptions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Silmara McGarry

1 Year Ago

It was one of my first poems. I wrote it in less then 10 min., it come out of nowhere, I just wanted.. read more

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Silmara McGarry

May we find our souls floating in the peaceful waters of it's original place. SM, United Kingdom



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I often try to see the world with angels eyes... To leave people better then I found them, even if is just with a smile... I Love God above all... Simple love poems are my favourite... Most of wha.. more..

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