Never Enough

They call me insane

Behind this troubled soul

Withstands so much pain

Because they will never ever know

The truth to these torn up pieces

I like to call my heart

 

A painted smile

Plastered across my face

Search deeper into the windows of my soul

And where all diamonds sparkle

A faded star fails to shine

In the large galaxy of wonders

I know there is still no place I belong

 

I wish upon those stars that beam down on me

But they are incapable of comprehending

Because all that appears of me

Is what you want to see

 

Running

Running

Running

A hole in my chest

I must continue running

Even though my body begs to rest

 

You shot me down

So your eyes can glare down upon me

Then you'll laugh

That laugh of what I know to be

Victory

Reviews

[Robbie]

Wow! This has depth...burning right to the soul! Your expression of pain beneath you smile is truly heartfelt. It saddens me... Great write!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

transparent and spontaneous
loved it

[Ian H Morrison]

great work you rea i have really enjoyed this thankyoully do have a tremendous amount of insight for one so young, i love this poem you have the balance correct all the way through

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, truly an awesome job here! I, too, feel this many, many times, and it's a very hard and horrible feeling to feel that im not good enough for anyone or anything. But, also, too, i am me, and i do my best. If people cant accept me for the way i am, then they could all jump in the lake, heh. Wonderful job tho, 'twas great!! :)

[Just Another Writer]

Wow.. very deep and moving. A lot of people can connect with this.. plenty of raw emotion in these beautifully composed lines. I loved it! You have a gift. :)

[Shy Girl]

This is a stunner for sure. Very emotional read for me..connect to it very well throughout the piece. Just ...WOW!!! Powerful words and yet it has a small voice saying them.. (can't tell you why I hear that I just do) WOW!! :)

[Thrinna Mae]

That was very powerful, emotional and straight-forward...You expressed the idea profoundly...Great work!
:)))

[JustLorry]

Emotional and heartfelt write, full of pain of the heart, which can only truly be caused by those we love. Great piece.

[Nath]

Wow, this is really beautiful. Dark and sad and beautiful.
You suceed at conveying the feelings you present. I can't say that any line is my favorite because they are all really good, but I particularly liked this part:
"And where all diamonds sparkle
A faded star fails to shine
In the large galaxy of wonders
I know there is still no place I belong"

[Asb]

really a thrilling read...nicely done...!!
and above all what you wanted to say is truly getting delivered by your writing.!
very nice :)