Diseased

Diseased

A Poem by simba
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I invite you back for tea, depression fear

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Disease......
Worthlessness....
Unholyness...
Guilt.....

I chose each one of you
I invited you back for tea
The conversation repeats
Time lasped
You consume me

Like worms you infested me
In broad daylight you isolate me
But I still invite you back for tea

Each one of you depletes me
There's no chrysalis
No beauty within
Just a dark and empty footpath to uncertainty

Believe me I want to be free from this misery
Strength can enthuse me
Craddled in bravery
But I still invite you back for tea....

© 2018 simba



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Now that's depression for you... the black dog is never fussy who it rubs against and has an insatiable appetite.... There are of course many forms of this foul creature & although all are feared, the agitated breed, is the most tenacious.... these words were crying out to be writ... and you wrote them well.... Neville

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Poetically dark and somber
Well written regarding such a powerful subject
Thank you for sharing such a relatable story

Posted 2 Days Ago


time to get out in the sunshine and flourish,need new friends

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I apologize if I took your comments wrong, you write poetry and I'm sure you have many friends and v.. read more
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Wow, this really brings the reality of life to a lot of people home. Pulling no punches just honesty and facts. Expressed to perfection eloquently put.

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Now that's depression for you... the black dog is never fussy who it rubs against and has an insatiable appetite.... There are of course many forms of this foul creature & although all are feared, the agitated breed, is the most tenacious.... these words were crying out to be writ... and you wrote them well.... Neville

Posted 1 Week Ago


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I love your words , you can't ignore past experience , you do face and stand against them , you accept them now , you fight , you are much braver and your writing reflect it beautifully

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Simba, I truly hope life is better for you than the infesting depression and fear described in this poignant poem. Your well-laid words are powerful and dramatic, with great analogies and expressive verses. I don’t believe that anyone would choose to entertain these feelings, but perhaps I’m wrong. The graphic imagery is macabre and dark. Depression is a cruel disease, but can be treated. I wish this for you.

Posted 1 Week Ago


simba

1 Week Ago

It's not a conscious choice, it's about the power struggle of depression where you feel euthoria one.. read more
simba

1 Week Ago

Also about guilt and burden you beat yourself up over.
This sounds like a haunting depression that one is able to hide during the day, but creeps back out of one is alone. I find it interesting that this person feels responsible for this depression. It's a very nice poem. If I were to change anything, I might consider changing "diseased" to "disease." I think this would create more parallelism.

Posted 1 Week Ago


This is a very creative way to portray how addiction feels. Even when we know it's bad, we keep coming back. The way you use "tea" as in a "tea party" makes this feel sarcastic, becuz of the contrast between frilly pretty tea party trappings & the ugly reality of how this narrator feels. Great contrast between "worms infesting" and the idea of breaking out from a chrysalis, transformed (hopefully). All in all, this is told with a sad dreary tone (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago



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Tags: Depression; fear; anxiety; worth

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