Rude revelations

Paint pricked my fingers 
Red sheds into other hues 
Enthrall and swim together 
Messy scrawls ensue 

Busied palms smudge the colors 
Racing against my beating pulse 
Past these chaos and hoarded rules 
Mind slips towards a radiant null

Coaxed and coerced by the paint 
My layers scatter among greys and blues 
Lips break into a smile, bit faint 
Eyes emote overwhelmed with this prelude 

Subdued messages finally shout 
Silently to be heard and pray 
Crystal tears join the drought
nuanced images come to play

Author's Note

Thanks a ton, Beth aka KWP for taking this apart and turning my gears to attack this little thing more viciously and make it a bit more alluring.

P.S: Imagine yourself at every personal reference rather than the author..

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

This is like actually being the painting as it takes form

[A. Amos]

My pal Beth leaded me here and I am glad she did, truly enjoyed the read.

[imagwriteine]

Love the rhythm, the imaging is also very very vivid. Nice one.

[hardeep sabharwal]

An intriguing write, very well written, well done

[sereenaoutloud]

beautiful, the picture is a sweet collaboration of colors and emotions. A vey nice write! It really makes me want to paint which i do miserably lol

[cycy]

this poem is very well written,,,intrigued well done dear

[Sindu]

Thank you for checking this out :)

[catwoman]

i really like this poem :)it felt like i could see the painting :)

[Sindu]

Thank you. Hope you liked the aftermath of what you saw :)

[Emily]

I love that first line!
Well done!

[Sindu]

Thank you :)

[Chris]

was like following a wall's mural of images...

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Chris :) I hope the images are worth the walk..

[Chris]

I didn't turn away....

[Sindu]

That's brilliant..

[Sindu]

What did you see?

[Chris]

Ahhhhhhh... but THAT would be telling - now wouldn't it? Chuckling here.

Forms and flowing curves, colors aswirl and curls and meandering whirls - articulate pauses and catch-your-breath mind-motes... Turning a corner while walking a straight path is sooo ...visual... don't you think?

[Sindu]

Haha.. Gotta share.
Very much. Especially if you stand at a corner and see the visuals merging on both sides.

[Valentine]

I also paint and instead of fingers I imagined the paint flow mixing with a brush and forming a pattern. Valentine

[Sindu]

Paint is paint. However the image is drawn, it breathes life into it. Thanks for checking it out :)

[Valentine]

Yes, I agree.