Mental Tattoos

Mental Tattoos

A Poem by sinNsincerity

I woke up, 

but I didn’t see you ‘till I day dreamed.

So I went to bed to only find out that you have left me.

Good grief, 

but I won’t find anyone grieving for me.

What a loss, 

but the time well spent was well worth the cost.

I would love to say that you are the one I have forgotten, 

but truly you are the reason for believing my heart will remain rotten.

My soul still remains white as cotton, 

but that won’t stop the picking of my thoughts which are plotting.

I think way too much and that’s my cancer.

Why such?

Such not that I’m needing answers, 

but just a moment of her time just so that I can be familiar with her unknown.

There’s no use for a clone because she is way too real.

And if we must remain separate, 

I’ll go ahead and assume that it was too soon while I enjoy this Blue Moon.

I need some space from me because all I can think of is her face and the grab of her waist.

I find myself writing about her even though she told me not to waste my imagination on her, 

but it’s hard not to when all that remains are mental tattoos.

© 2015 sinNsincerity


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This left me breathless. I absolutely love your turn of phrase and your word choice is impeccable. I literally had gooseflesh by the time I read your final line. It shot straight through me.

"...when all that remains are mental tattoos."

I am so fascinated by this offering - the permanency on our hearts and souls of the imprint of someone else. Laser removal doesn't quite measure up in the matters of heart and love. I adore the manner in which you captured that. A passing train of thought ending at bone chilling station of realization and acceptance.

So, so well done. You truly are a master of expression.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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This is a wonderful poem, and kind of heartbreaking as well. The only thing here - I think - is that the last couple of lines suddenly felt too long, and the last line felt out of place. Maybe if you can rearrange it? Other than that, I really enjoyed your poem. It was a good read. Great job! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Why thank you Maja, I really appreciate your insight!
Maja

8 Years Ago

You're welcome! ^_^
Hey Sin, go ahead and.enjoy that blue moon for this is written
with class and swag at the same time.. mental tattoo of an alluring images chasing that dream so clear at the start but left you
Sprung and wanting for more at the end.. cool stuff! Thanks,!


Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Haha thank you man!
this is such an emotional poem i love u

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Yvo!
I love the meaning!
Keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Emily!
"But it's hard not to when all that remains are mental tattoos." -- striking words, really wonderful too.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Very true!
this a mental journey. its beautiful

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for thinking so and seeing it that way.
I always love the convoluted logic and wordplay found in your poems. Your reader has to be on his toes mentally when reading the ones you write in this. Your linking one image with another from line to line.
Mental tattoos is a favorite metaphor for those deeply ingrained images that are colored with indelible ink. Their those images that may fade over the years, but don't ever quite disappear.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jan. It means so much!
I used to not like thinking of those memories, but I.. read more
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Many shocking or troublesome things can leave mental tattoos that are as hard to erase as real ones on skin.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Very much so...
Thank you Dan!
dan

8 Years Ago

SiS, You know what? I actually wrote quite a bit more in my review but when I posted the comment all.. read more
very moving words...the need is a concrete feeling shared...well done...

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading. Always a pleasure!
jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

for me as well
a good theme to write on,mental tattos very creative sin

Posted 8 Years Ago


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sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Sir!

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