Vdara

Shivery, lust, and bad attitudes...

Were all on the menu

Yester-moon.

It was rather a great late afternoon…

Your lipstick shade decayed the day

Along with harpooning the mood.

And we shared stage frights

Until the stars met our eyes.

Oh my,

           The kiss you left on my chest was bliss!

No, it was much more Ms.

I savored every inch of it

Knowing it wouldn’t remain,

But to me…

It was sacred.

It was painless.

It was the perfect silence.

And “it”

Wasn’t afraid to welcome in the rain ---

It said , “chime in.”

It was a perfect harmony like a wind chime

When our souls met.

Some will say our love is a crime,

But I don’t mind.

Because

                     I love you.

And you..?

Hummingbird

Nectar,

The reason why my neck hurts!

That’s magical like

The Mayan temples,

And when

They re...discover

This Love,

It will uncover a new

Category list

Of philosopher.

Reviews

[JayceeC]

You really write great beat poetry..I wants to be read allowed. The rhythm pulls me through even when there's a line that I want to question, and so it deserves another read. On second read I started really looking at the contradictions. . Decay and harpooning are hallmarks of somrthing dying, but as I read on it was clearly not the intent. Then the crime..made me think..why? Why is it a crime? Byond that I enjoyed the tumble of metaphors you used to build this. Only dicover should be discovered. Your creativity is to be commended.

[sinNsincerity]

Nice, my goal was to give that rhythm and beat, so that is would be a pleasure to read and do exactly what you said: to pull you in. The love is a crime because it differs from the ordinary norm Love. That why in the end I say when it is discovered it would have to be studied...
Thank you for reading Jaycee!

[GalaxyGhost]

Lovely imagery and it was powerful, too. It's even cooler when you wrote this in a hotel.(I love visiting hotels and haunted ones are fascinating.)

[sinNsincerity]

I never been to a haunted one that I know of...

[girly]

Whoa you made that hotel proud :P
Coming on to the point, it was a sweet one indeed. If you would have written this intentionally for someone, that person would have loved it too, because it had a charming spell indeed.
Just loved it. 'Yester-moon'.. well that's something interesting.
And the best part -
'Some will say our love is a crime,
But I don’t mind
Because
I love you'

That's lovely.
~Mills (Millie)

[sinNsincerity]

I did intentionally write this for someone and she has seen it.
Yester-moon, yester-years... they're all the same hehe
I'm glad you enjoyed it Mllie.
David.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

A very beautiful poem. About an unconditional love. The imagery and word play was phenomenal. Good job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Lauren!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Your welcome :)

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The best part about your poems are the metaphors that you chose. Works pretty well almost every time. The perfect silence that you have mentioned might as well be powerful enough to speak a million words holding countless sentiments; those sentiments that will flood your heart with nectar and make you discover magic. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Magic indeed! I like to give credit where credit is due and during my first year into my English Major I had a writing professor who was such a sorceress when it came to metaphors. She could stress it enough to stay away from cleches and how every phrase has been used a million times. She convinced me that it was personally my job to think of new ways to say the same things that everyone else is saying. She told me that, "without attention to detail, you can inform, but not persuade."

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Absolutely. Good to know that you are doing justice to your learning and giving the due honor to your mentor.

[Asante]

A lady mentioned this below, and she's spot on: This had a really sweet rhythm to it, something to keep most anyone engaged throughout. These could be song lyrics, even. I'm digging this one, my guy.

[sinNsincerity]

Ah dude, I wrote this while listening to a jazz station and this killer piano solo took over me.

[Ana B.]

Hauntingly beautiful dance of thoughts dear author. Very compelling writing, as ever :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Ana! It is always such a pleasure to hear from you, I highly appreciate your feeling towards it.

[Lucifer, The Royal King..]

You are really talented, you know that? You make my work seem like nothing in my mind. Your writing is amazing, it flows really well, and there's a ton of wordplay. Good job! Full review from me. Keep it up, I love reading your work :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I was really in the zone when I wrote this.
Talent, and a lot of hard work, and a lot of living life that's all.
Writing means the world to me and I adore. It's so precious and timeless because it allows me as well as others to time travel to that exact moment in time. That's beautiful to me.
And the thing that is more beautiful about poetry, is that you can make it what ever you want.
Once I went to college and learned some writing tools and rules about writing, I figured it was my duty to use those tools to break the rules and add my soul into poetry.
I believe that you can do the same and that you will.

[Lucifer, The Royal King Of Hell]

You are quite welcome and thank you for having such faith in me. It truly means a lot to me.

[Hope Rose]

This is amazing, really. The flow of the words makes lyrical. Great job! Keep it up! :)

~Shadow

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much!

[Hope Rose]

You are quite welcome!

[Celie Rose]

Finger snapping rhythm and beat to your poem. Flowed nicely. I liked that. Yester-moon..good phrase. Metaphors also were very good. Nice piece. Keep writing.

[sinNsincerity]

That was my intention, so thank you. I'm glad you did like it!

[alf]

So very much admire your metaphoric intent here!!! Wow.... lipstick decaying the day!!! Harpooning the moment!! A brilliant write, my friend!!

[sinNsincerity]

This one is a masterpiece to me. I used so much literary tools I have learned hear and the zone I was in when I wrote it was magical!
Thank you Alf, it's my pleasure!

[alf]

You sure did my friend>>> This is perfect!!