Drive in Theatre

Like I’ll never get it done…

That is the song I always hummed.

When the day has begun,

Her face is the only one

I want to view next to the sun.

Lovers never sleep alone

And I sleep alone.

Facing the wall with your photo in hand

Wishing you were in my zone…

Waiting ‘till the clock strikes a nerve

To spend some time with you!

Can’t depend on the shadow you cast down,

Please make your presence known!

Making a statement,

Showing what we’re made of...

Making up for lost time…

Treating it as a crime,

So I’m sleeping with the lights on

Hoping one day you’ll be in sight.

Thousands of miles away…

Can’t go wrong

Can’t go right

Suiting the moment perfect

The lasting impressions...

My heart can explode!

Come down!

Come out!

Please shout!

No doubt,

I have a feeling I’m lost…

Oh such an aching heart for this hopeless romantic,

I’m not one for the dramatics.

Ready,

Set,

Action,

And CUT!

Editing the images I kept in my mind for the big screen

Because I need to see you,

I need to feel you,

I need to love you!

I have a greater fear of being alone

Than a broken Corazon.

Staying out of sight

Staying out of mind

Hell and back

I woke up tired

feeling old!

She has gone…

{How did heaven let you go?}

Turning my heart into snow

And then it melted into a pebble.

What if I never knew you name?

But LOVE is EVOL!

Your touch…

Wondering how you entered my soul?

Playing favorites

Searching for a craving…

Hoping you never felt unwanted

Hoping you know you are not forgotten.

The lonely words:

I MISS YOU!

I’ll just leave it at this...

Reviews

[B]

I love it

And I am living this right now

Very nicely done

I bet it will all turn out just fine ..... The person you long for .... Longs for you
It's only fair if you have a feeling in your heart the other person holds it too

So the longing will lead to you both being together stuck like glue

It will

I love this one

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Ms.
It makes me smile that you could make a connection.
I feel I was at least half way decent to be remember by the one I long for. =D

[B]

Eventually the longing shall end and you be together
I believe in love

[sinNsincerity]

I do as well and I fell it deep within.
Separation makes the heart grow fonder and maybe we need this time a part, so if we are reunited, we won't make the same mistake of giving up on one another...

[B]

True

Loving hearts just don't seem to ever give up now do they ?!!

Lol
I know the feeling

[sinNsincerity]

Love was never born to say goodbye...

[B]

Very wise and very true

[Passengerr]

'love is evol', i'll always remember that line. hope it works out well in the end.

[sinNsincerity]

That's awesome!
Thank you for reading man.

[Passengerr]

my pleasure.

[sereenaoutloud]

love it, long distance relationships can work and be even stronger but it's tough and tests you both !! You always have such awesome formats.... You inspire me to take more risks with my writes !!

[sinNsincerity]

That means a lot to hear!
Just keep taking risk and don't worry what other people will think love =D

[Etta Beasley]

Powerful piece.. I especially admire the creative way you organized this. Well done :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for reading Etta!
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Real Inspiration]

I honestly love this!
I was in a long-distance-relationship and it didn't work out but i fully can relate to this. I love when people write things I can relate to, makes me feel so connected. Very good write you have here, keep it up!

[sinNsincerity]

Sorry to hear that, but I'm so glad that you can find a connection!
Thank you for reading.

[earthperceptions]

I really liked the "ready, set, action, Cut" portion especially in relation to the title. You capture the end of a relationship well, It is definitely relatable. "staying out of sight, staying out of mind" Very heartfelt

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much!
I'm so glad that you could relate and make a connection.
Thank you for reading.

[JayceeC]

Another nice write my friend. The only sticking point for me was lines 6 & 7
Lovers never sleep alone/
And I sleep alone.
I think changing up the second line of this a bit would help. Something like "I sleep alone in this bed that is my own" or "I sleep alone in this house that isn't a home" near rhyme would do it and maybe that is not what you want but using the same word to end two lines that are next to each other seems off after the Previous lines.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Jan. =D

[Ishita Dixit]

I liked the variations in this poem.
Like the changing tempos of a song.
You penned down your feelings excellently well!
My favourite line: Hoping you know you are not forgotten.
Great write bud! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Ishita!
I'm glad you liked the changing of tempos. That's why I called it the Drive in Theatre. =D

[xbxbzdvdsv]

i really enjoyed this poem, keep it up, i've been there.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much!

[Sarah Hampton]

I really like the ebb and flow, the highs and lows, of this one. My favorite line: 'How did heaven let you go?' That is a very good question.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Sarah. I highly appreciate your review!