Deleted Scenes

Deleted Scenes

A Poem by sinNsincerity

In every 'while of uncertainty, 

I've walked outside of my mind like a dead man’s soul 

Does to his expressionless body.



This is my new found hobby.

I’m no longer left sobbing; 



I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby.

© 2016 sinNsincerity


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In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much.. read more



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In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much.. read more
Its crazy to me how you have managed to write somethig so beautiful and emotional in such a few words! Envious of that! Loved it! Keep writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for that, I highly appreciate that.
It takes a lot of deep thought for me t.. read more
When i first opened it up, seemed like it would be dull. But after i read it, wow! Short, but full of emotion.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Ahaa
Thank you Kathryn!
A lot said in the short poem.
"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby."
The forbidden lobby left the reader with questions. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

I got it now and you are welcome.
Susana Puente

7 Years Ago

Wow great to know you give a piece of ur forbidden lobby,and to my opinión is full of intreging ben.. read more
sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Everyone is welcome...if they dare...
Not very long, that was my first thought. But as I read it, every word, everysentence had more then enough meaning packed in it that it didn't need to be overbearing or long. The words you chose were brilliant, the structure and feeling both are very good. I love this piece. Thank you for sharing:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Angela, I feel like my writing was really at a good place when it was done, so I really ap.. read more
You have a gift for putting a lot of meaning into so few words. This is something I can only imagine to have. Good job, I love it. Full rating from me.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Silver for thinking so, and you could as well.
My writing is no where close to wher.. read more
Lucifer, The Royal King Of Hell

8 Years Ago

That is really cool. I never thought about that. Though, for me, words just show up whenever I'm rea.. read more
seems very deep, like it has such meaning behind it, very poetic soulful piece.
Its a shame I don't understand the meaning behind it haha.
Keep writing :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I wrote this about how, in my opinion, it is important for me to get out of myself and lo.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

hmm that's pretty deep. I was right it was very meaningful :)
Great wording!!
I loved it!
Keep on writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Emily!
Interesting, very short but so long at the same time. Nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
I like your poem. Short but meaningful. "I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." I get a sense of a lost soul trying to find it's way. Nicely written. Keep writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

8 Years Ago

Thank you Celie. It's more about my soul enjoying being lost and being out and about. Something that.. read more

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