Wonder Lust

Wonder Lust

A Poem by sinNsincerity

You left me breathless

when you asked,

“Do you like my

necklace?,” as

you escalated your

fingers down from

your left collar

bone towards your cleavage.

The center piece...

Heart exceeding because

a dose of you is

extremely needed!

Please my dear, I’m

in dire need

of O D-ing!



© 2018 sinNsincerity



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Lovely write! Can sense the passion between the lines...

However, I'm not sure whether "escalate" is the right word for what the fingers did......yes, maybe the situation escalated.......and that is quite a pivotal verb in the poem.....so I cannot suggest an alternative, but that's what I got in my first reading.....

Towards the end of the poem, it got a "rap" vibe, where my feet started to tap, but then it stopped.....as if there was more to come....

Great work!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Months Ago

Escalate as in an escalator. They go up as well as down. Hence her fingers moving downward.
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I wonder if its not a bad idea to O.D. on anything - even our lover then I go nah! I couldnt think of a better person to overdo it with.
Good one Sin. I like the play on words here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Anto!
Genuine and desirable write.
All things should not fix on girls.
Enjoy it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it!
sounds like the testosterone just kicked in ... ahh now bring those eyes back to eye level handsome ;) X

Posted 3 Years Ago


sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

I'll try to hehe =D Thanks for reading hon.
Well penned!
Yep those girls can most definitely have the ding effect on us:)
Imagery is very clear in this piece, I enjoyed it a ton!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

And I rather enjoy it hahaha
Thanks for reading man!
women are that way,i have no idea

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Hehe, Thank you for reading Sir!

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