God in the Ninth Inning

Women think deep!

Who do you think taught me?

Who do you think inspired this poetry?

Who do you think?

Quite insistent.

Smell the incense?

White M@gik!

But deeper I go;

Quite subliminal...

Because lately,

Mrs. 7even-6ix  has forgotten about me.

She was digging me...

The horned mermaid left me at sea.

My Capricornuns Mistress.

Showing and taking it all in a blink.

3rd 3y3ed sacrifice.

Exposing me,

So I can view her compositions.

Feeling the feelings,

But the honesty of humanity

Has told me

F**K YOUR FEELINGS!

Quite insistent.

So I read in the lines-

In between my mind

In between my honesty

In between...

But please,

Please,

Get out of me.

Author's Note

Abracadabara
I create as I speak



Battle-Star-Galactica Heart/Love,
Novela,
Gothspel-Poetry,
Done-with-Secular-Poerty,
Are-U-Still-Down,
Magik

Reviews

[PaintedBirdy]

i definitely enjoyed this.

with the first line "women think deep!" i can interpret this two ways, which make the following parts have different meanings. it's either a plea for women to think deep or a statement that deep thinking is what women do. i'm not sure if you intended this as ambiguous but my first read-through was the interpretation that it's a plea for women to think deep about why you write poetry, and the answer is because of another woman. haha. i can, sadly, relate. haha.

i laughed pretty hard at the "F**K YOUR FEELINGS" part because i didn't expect to read that so boldly, but i definitely see the truth of how 'humanity' tells guys to interpret women's feelings. i like the word play in the next few lines about 'reading between.' i really like the creativity you got here. damn good!

[sinNsincerity]

Well personally, women are the closest thing to God, so I worship them as well... Every women I have met has taught me a little more about myself, them, and the world.
But I do use ambiguity a lot in my writing. It leave people to think, "what the hell is going on here...?"

[Davidgeo]

Ha... you are very clever.

Extremely clever. I enjoyed that quite a bit.

[sinNsincerity]

Nice nice nice

[Adorkable Neko]

Absolutely love the transition of this piece. The way it flows into each emotion and then begging at the end... I am amazed at your ease of writing with this. Please keep up the great work!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad you enjoyed those transitions because it's something I've been trying to master. Not quite where I want it yet, but almost there...

[Adorkable Neko]

Keep it up, practice makes perfect!

[Phoen-ix]

I really love this piece, reminds me of Third Eye Blind back in the day for some reason. Well done!!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad you did Phoenix. Hehe high school bands were so cool. Miss those daze.

[T. Edana Talbott]

Your style reminds me of a poet friend I once knew. I'm as mesmerized with your style as I was his. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Maybe I should take it up a notch eh...

[Pink Pastel]

Cool way to express that^-^

[sinNsincerity]

Glad you feel so.

[Pink Pastel]

Yup sin^-^

[wordman]

well you hit all the notes,an a + for u

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sir Ron!

[AmandaFuller]

I love this. Nice work!! Keep it up.

[sinNsincerity]

Always....

[busterlee]

It's got a definite male frustrated edge to it. I understand. I enjoyed the read.

[sinNsincerity]

Quite interesting... the frustration might be coming from masculine and feminine angles, but there's so many voiced the lay within me and not so much learning to let them speak, but allowing them to finally speak.

[Ruth]

Oh damn cool! :) Smiling, brilliant hon, some of this imagery is totally surreal and epic :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Ruth, I'm still trying to tap into that magik that will just be too much for some to comprehend...
Always a pleasure.

[Jamestown]

Good stuff my California friend:)
The numbers and symbols are a cool touch.
I hope all is well, b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you James, how's life in the Rockies?