Give Me End

Give Me End

A Poem by sinNsincerity

The one who says she really loves me,

Is the one I can't have yet.

And she knows this.

Polarity is frozen.

Yet; Love is my target,

So allow me to zone in.

But is there another way to love you?

Is there?

Let me share 'em with you,

I'm who.

Who?

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Call me Mr. Marlboro,

But I'm your toy

#Hasbro

Ouija?

No-

Just  Wicca-

Pedia mind.

But please take the time

To undefine the bottom line.

Do you mind if I incline

You the opportunity to just mind?

Ajar, I'll leave your heart at far...

But so far...

My poetry is leading me further away from she,

So it's hard to love anyone

'Till I'm DONE



© 2016 sinNsincerity



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sinNsincerity
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Wow like how you state the narrator know she loves him but he can don't have her till he is down which make him wish to write more so it takes I'm further from bwing done and from her. This is very powerful. He wishes to love her but only knows of one way. That way he know just can not be done for some reason unknown to the reader. He wishes to find a different way for the love he has is forbade by that reason. It is a iner struggle between ones desires and what one can have. He wishestablished to love her but doestrogen not know how. So you both yore for each other but something or someone is keeping you apart. And you wish for that to end which means time is standing in your way. But you can wait but you do not wish to wait. I to know this feeling it has past now I may love the one I crave but that's because time passed. So you to will be able to love the one who you so dearly love if you have not already. I love how you used words that have a deep feel to them. This was a wonderful read. I loved it so much. Keep on working to gain your love and writing. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

It is the timing and I'm glad to hear you and your beloved have been able to hold on to that love. T.. read more



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i like the conflict in the first three lines: she loves the narrator but the narrator can't have her for some unsaid reason. that's quite a struggle, and it makes me wonder why the narrator (you i assume) can't have her yet. sounds complicated, haha. and to add to that, she knows you can't be with her yet. that's an imbroglio in the first act!

to manage the situation, the narrator says something - i interpret - like, let's see if we can redefine our relationship somehow to make this work until i can be with you, "till i'm done" which makes me wonder, done with what? done with this poem? done with feeling to another person? done with some other commitment, maybe to another person, i dunno. just adds to the complexity of the situation.

my favorite lines were between 'but i'm your toy...pedia mind' awesome writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

We both love each other, but timing is never on time... It's always blueshifted.
It's been ei.. read more
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It's all good, Sin :) Take your time. What's yours will be yours. I kinda dig how you say I got to get her out to let you in. You have a unique and clever poetic voice

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lynn, I do acknowledge that. I just get a tad bit weary sometimes and ugh...
But fa.. read more
I love it. It's got a creepy vibe to it... I don't care if you meant for that it's what I like about it.

Only about half of your stuff is good to me, but the good half is really fuggin good; well done Mr Dr Cat Face Sir Sin in Sincerity.





Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

It's all good, I don't care either...
Sin, you have such a clever puny way with words. This one is just another example of it. Loved the Wicca-Pedia play on words. A moving magician...of sorts. But were always morphing, changing...hopefully you find the right girl at the right time.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I missed you Jan. How have you been?
I magician with words is my devotion.
Thank you .. read more
Your poems are always kind of odd to me. But, I suppose it's the creativity woven into them that confuses me. The way you write them. I agree with Eli that it's interesting how you wrote in those lines with toy and #Hasbro. Quite a different approach to things.
Good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm an odd individual. It would be less confusing if you'd research what was confusing.
Enjoyed your poem..the longing, the hope. Feelings are sincere and very deep.
Well expressed and written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Always sincere
Nice poem! Such creativity. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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thaleeyaLuna

1 Year Ago

Haha, and funny too! :D
sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

very much so hehe
thaleeyaLuna

1 Year Ago

and you say 'hehe' a lot too. :D
First off let me just say that I can totally relate to loving somebody but not being able to be with that person yet. Secondly, I really like these lines the most:

"But I'm your toy
#Hasbro
Ouija?
No-
Just Wicca-
Pedia mind."

They flowed really nice to me (and it's kind of funny how you related toy to Hasbro and so on).

A very creative piece indeed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Yea, it sucks. Thank you Eli, I'm trying to be the metaphor king.
People read into it and tak.. read more
sometimes love is not an easy road,sometimes it hurts before it heals

Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I don't believe it ever will be an easy road... I'm searching for the one who won't throw it all awa.. read more
 wordman

1 Year Ago

you will find the right one
My friend you are an amazing writer going beyond structures or patterns none of that matters you have the ability to pull people into your own pace without any resistance they want to in fact they are begging you to draw them into your majestic soul thank you so much for giving me the opportunity to read this it is really special.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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TheAimlessWanderer

1 Year Ago

damn sin you would make a great dad !(:
Wølfy

1 Year Ago

I know! This guy.
sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Call me David...

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