Give Me End

Give Me End

A Poem by sinNsincerity

The one who says she really loves me,

Is the one I can't have yet.

And she knows this.

Polarity is frozen.

Yet; Love is my target,

So allow me to zone in.

But is there another way to love you?

Is there?

Let me share 'em with you,

I'm who.

Who?

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Call me Mr. Marlboro,

But I'm your toy

#Hasbro

Ouija?

No-

Just  Wicca-

Pedia mind.

But please take the time

To undefine the bottom line.

Do you mind if I incline

You the opportunity to just mind?

Ajar, I'll leave your heart at far...

But so far...

My poetry is leading me further away from she,

So it's hard to love anyone

'Till I'm DONE



© 2016 sinNsincerity



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sinNsincerity
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Wow like how you state the narrator know she loves him but he can don't have her till he is down which make him wish to write more so it takes I'm further from bwing done and from her. This is very powerful. He wishes to love her but only knows of one way. That way he know just can not be done for some reason unknown to the reader. He wishes to find a different way for the love he has is forbade by that reason. It is a iner struggle between ones desires and what one can have. He wishestablished to love her but doestrogen not know how. So you both yore for each other but something or someone is keeping you apart. And you wish for that to end which means time is standing in your way. But you can wait but you do not wish to wait. I to know this feeling it has past now I may love the one I crave but that's because time passed. So you to will be able to love the one who you so dearly love if you have not already. I love how you used words that have a deep feel to them. This was a wonderful read. I loved it so much. Keep on working to gain your love and writing. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

It is the timing and I'm glad to hear you and your beloved have been able to hold on to that love. T.. read more



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Good flow, lots of energy. I enjoyed your poem and like your style.
Richie b.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Positive energy and love. Thank you Richie, it was my pleasure.
I really, really like this! Nice flow, I like how you transition from idea to idea, it's really cool.


Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you Edina, I do my best to present what's in my mind.
Kind of very interesting concept, first of all the construction of the poem was very good... The ending is what helped me to understand the deep meaning of this write... Cleverly done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

It was my pleasure Dimanche, thank you.
-David
I love the flow of this poem, wonderful work!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm glad that you did.
Interesting poem. Really like the last lines. Keep writing. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you did.
I like how the poem seems to drift away. It's really interesting!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Things that drift away eventually converge.
The only criticism I can offer you it that the lines,
"#Hasbro
Ouija?
No-
Just Wica-
Pedia mind."
don't really make a lot of sense. Otherwise good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I makes total sense.
I said I was a toy. Something to be playedone.
Hasbro is a board .. read more
RaeAlyn

1 Year Ago

I tend to be very literal.
Yes oddly enough lately that's how It's been with me. I've expressed and expressed like a silly wurm and bam! She's not around....a shame eh? Maybe I'm wanting too much? "Wanting?" What's that? Well.....you seem a smart fellow.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1nfinite_Justice

1 Year Ago

ha or maybe my poetry just SUCKS? XD
Wow! That is a really nice poem.: )


Posted 1 Year Ago


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sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you for thinking so Akshita.
excellent poetry... good way of describing love though... liked the flow..
keep it up....
Anindita : )

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you liked it.

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