Bankrupt

Bankrupt

A Poem by sinNsincerity

No warranty came along with their hearts.

I've musta lost a dozen homes;

Ugh,

But they were the ones who had

Foreclosed this love of mine.

Loan, after loan, after loan,

They each fell through.

That's what they were.

Alone.

Is that what I am?

Reckless abandonment...

But hey,

I'll be alright.

At least,

That's what

I always

Tell

My

Self.



© 2018 sinNsincerity



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sinNsincerity
Gothspel

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Nice writing my man, I enjoyed it. Nothing wrong with telling ourselves we will survive. Learning from past challenges, I wear my scars as badges of honor.
Richie b.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you Richie, glad to hears so!



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I enjoy your poems. They are very clever and unique! I enjoy the meaning and your word choices! This one too!
Well penned!
I tripped through this line a bit while reading...
"I've must of lost a dozen homes.."
Did you mean...I must have lost a dozen homes?
Tabby

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Months Ago

Thank you Ms. Mac, what I meant to say was "musta" as in must have.
Hmm... touching and achingly true. I really like this rhyme scheme for impact!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I have to say that I think this is one of my favorite poems you've wrote. I love the word place, and the emotion pack into such few words. Fantastic job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very deep meaning in my perspective (: good job

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nice. It started off to be sad, then you uplifted it at the end

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading Kylie.
This was wow! Great writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you for thinking so Daniealla.
I love this. "I've must of lost a dozen homes"
To me this shows you made a place for yourself in peoples hearts
Love it !!



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I would like to think so. Thank you for reading Pia, have a great day.
I often feel the same way. Emotionally bankrupt. Drained. But one side of my brain then starts to fight with the other side of my brain over whether or not I'll be fine or the fine will be me. It's a struggle, but if it isn't a struggle, it isn't life.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Most certainly it wouldn't be life without loves debt. Thank you for reading, I'm more than glad tha.. read more
well done metaphor held throughout ...i have a terrible time doing that ... syntax is a stumble in this "I've must of lost a dozen homes;" ... at least for me anyway ... i love the form .. the trailing off in closing is perfect ... brings it all home says i! and the pic is astounding ...i am compelled to look at the faces deeply .. for a long time .. the pain, dismay and anger i see is profound .. it adds another emotive level or two to your expression
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Months Ago

It hasta...
Hasta be Shasta.
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

;) the change fits .. and again..love the metaphor ...warrenties, banks and loans have been pushed s.. read more
Two thumbs up. Good imagery and sensory of emotional aspects

Posted 1 Year Ago



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