Bankrupt

No warranty came along with their hearts.

I've musta lost a dozen homes;

Ugh,

But they were the ones who had

Foreclosed this love of mine.

Loan, after loan, after loan,

They each fell through.

That's what they were.

Alone.

Is that what I am?

Reckless abandonment...

But hey,

I'll be alright.

At least,

That's what

I always

Tell

My

Self.

Author's Note

Gothspel

Reviews

[richieb]

Nice writing my man, I enjoyed it. Nothing wrong with telling ourselves we will survive. Learning from past challenges, I wear my scars as badges of honor.
Richie b.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Richie, glad to hears so!

[Rebekah Smith]

This is relatable: it sounds like a giver, a healer...somebody that 'does' for others, secretly craves the appreciation that they know they won't get and gives themself anyway.

[sinNsincerity]

A pleasure Rebekah. Secrets that the pages cherish dearly and I hand them out in silence.

[Johnny]

Very good, something we should all remember

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad that you had enjoyed it.

[Double T]

How this is really good message. And it is really reflective because of the election coming up.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Double T

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST IMPRESSIONS

Initially, I was drawn to this because of the artistic nude which already speaks volumes on its own. Bankruptcy is a common ailment that could trigger our sense of desperation such as prostitution, exotic dancer, or just posing for artistic nudes for money. Personally, the human body is a work of art so I do not perceive it as objectifying.

CONTENT AND FORMAT

Thus far, there is a reoccuring theme of failed love affairs. "Bankruptcy" has now attained two meanings: bankruptcy of love and bankruptcy of money. Subjectively, the poem seems to aim more towards loss of relationships; an unspoken loan of our emotions. I do not think we can ever repay the feelings we have for someone. There comes the day when we no longer have gambling chips or pieces of our heart.

CLOSING THOUGHTS

Overall, I enjoyed this as well from you. You are able to put a unique spin on concrete words, giving them abstract meanings. Thank you for sharing!

sincerely,
ria

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for spending the time to read and leaving me your thoughts Ria, I highly appreciate that.
-David

[Vria P Crow]

You are very welcome. :D

[KT-B]

Very clever, I really liked this, well written, flowed easily - well done

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

"But they were the ones who had
Foreclosed this love of mine."

Powerful lines! As a struggling millennial freshly out of graduate school, I can totally relate to this piece. In a way, telling ourselves we are fine when we are not is almost a human coping mechanism that a lot of us deal with, especially when we are so young and trying to dip our feet into the deep end of the pool we call "adulthood." Its amazing what the human mind can do to try and cling onto hope as much as possible in times of struggle. The human brain is so fascinating!

[sinNsincerity]

Hope and faith can carry someone for eternity...
Very fascinating!

[Valentine]

Correct, there never is a warranty on lasting happiness. Valentine

[sinNsincerity]

Just honesty, that's all I ask for...

[Brooke]

Wow, very deep with little words. Well done! As far as the structure goes, it seems good to me! Poetry was never my strong suit lol! I like your topic though because it's not something people usually write about, but that's what makes it special.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Brooke, one of my goals is to take what people know and tell them something that they don't. That's why I love to write; people have been writing for eons, so it's my duty and pleasure to bring something new to the table each single time. Very special and so are you.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

There are no guarantees in life or with love...
connections are often broken and consumed by other false bearings.
commodities and reckless spending can ruin it all and bringing are bitter ending to a relationship.
The build up of hate and hurt can be overwhelming.
Starting over isn't easy and if it is done too soon it doesn't float--it sinks!

[sinNsincerity]

And I acknowledge that by all means, guarantees and security isn't what I'm searching for... Just truth, that's all.
I'm not one who turns towards hate. I tend to forgive quite easily. I just don't like to get played. Tell me what's on your mind. You know???
And I never have to start over as long as I never give up.
Thank you for your insight Josie, I really enjoyed and respect what you have said.
God bless.