Rum is for Drinking not Burning

Rum is for Drinking not Burning

A Poem by sinNsincerity

I walked the plank and stumbled into your sea of a heart.

Shackled and chained.

"Any last words?"

-She offered with disdain.

Yes, just the last you had spoken unto me.

"Rum is for drinking not burning."

Red as the sea,

The pirate’s life is the life for me.

She followed me through victory,

But you see,

She slept with one eye opened,

While I held the misfortune of possessing none.

My sight was aimed on her heart

And hers on the treasure chest.

The dismay of your betrayal

Has forced me to take my very last drink.

She has overthrown the ship

As Alexander did to Thebes.

You Thief.

F**k you!



© 2016 sinNsincerity



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Hello Sin in Sincerity,

Here are a few notes I made while reading. Feel free to use them or discard them as you see fit. :)

My sight was aimed [at] her heart *Was is in the passive voice. Consider using a different word.

I hope this helps.

Your poetry is so raw and passionate. Nicely done!

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi





Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you for you suggestion Schatzi.



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haha that f**k you at the end had me going. XD

Wonderfully written! :) Raw and real at it's best.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Months Ago

hehe, I'm glad to hear that Kathryn.
Aloha, I enjoyed this from start to finish. You're a very clever writer :) and I loved the twist at the end I did not expect that at all. Great read. Izzy

Posted 7 Months Ago


Uhm wow! What a dark turn! I love it :) Once again, another great read. It was a pleasure.

Posted 9 Months Ago


This ended differently than I expected...and I loved it. I laughed out loud at the last line.
May all of our last words ring as true
As a good old-fashioned "F**K YOU!"
You're very clever!!! I loved it. I believe I said that already... >.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

10 Months Ago

I'm more that glad that you did Rachel. Especially that it made you laugh. That makes it all worth i.. read more
I love the ending, particularly. I'm not too well acquainted with poetry but I enjoyed this very much. I personally would have enjoyed a description of the setting or just little details of the characters, but again, I'm not very informed about what constitutes good poetry.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Enjoyed the energy and creativity of your work. A lot said in a short amount of words. No pushing or shoving just getting it done.
Richie b.

Posted 11 Months Ago


sinNsincerity

10 Months Ago

Thank you Richie, I highly appreciate that. I do my best to stay sharp and to add new things each ti.. read more
That opening line made it for me. I adore you for creating such a masterpiece. I am left picking up my jaw on this one! One of my favorites for sure

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

10 Months Ago

Did it really!? Thank you Crystal, I really appreciate that and it means so much to hear.
I envision Johnny Depp for some reason after reading this. Good imagery.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you Sarah hehe
Your writing is so raw and real here. Nicely done. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you, I appreciate that Nessly?
I loved this poem my friend.
"Rum is for drinking not burning."
Red as the sea,
The pirate’s life is the life for me.
She followed me through victory,
But you see,
She slept with one eye opened,"
The above lines. So good and honest. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you Coyote, I'm really glad that you did love it!
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did and you are welcome.

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