Throw It all away for Love

Throw It all away for Love

A Poem by sinNsincerity
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Gospel

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You could never understand my pain.

Even if I allowed you to enter my brain.

So for heaven’s sake, I safeguard my heart, so you could never slide inside

unless we create an exodus in bed and partake in tasting the flesh.

And the secrets would most likely push you away, and that'll prove my point, so don't point the blame on me when you say I have brought pain onto you.

The girl I gave away my virginity to is so sacred and placed a curse on me, and it works so perfectly.

I throw it all away for Love.

If I don't throw it all away,

I will become...

It hurts so much to be,

so mote it be.


© 2017 sinNsincerity



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It's a decent idea, but the piece has some flow problems. The rhythm isn't there for me. I read it three or four times, but it still seemed to mesh unevenly. I could rationalize that, given the subject of the piece, the breaks in flow could represent the uneven feelings of heartbreak, or betrayal, but there's just something missing. Experimentation is great to improve your own skills, but this doesn't read like it's finished. Take all of this with a grain of salt, of course. Happy writing, Sin.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Weeks Ago

Is that salt iodized? Haha
No worries, I love when people give me their honest opinion. Some.. read more



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Truly a touching piece. So relatable 🖤

Posted 3 Days Ago


I love it. Very relatable. I feel your pain. The one thing I would say, is to improve the flow of the poem. It seems kind of crammed. Try to separate them, try to make it as you're telling a story. Try to slow it down, piece by piece. However, otherwise it's very good. Enjoyed it.

Posted 6 Days Ago


I can relate to this poem. I have threw away so many things for someone I though I loved but in reality it wasn't meant to be. Great poem :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Days Ago

I'm just the opposite. I had someone who was meant to be and threw away love for other things...ther.. read more
Lauren_The_Awesome

6 Days Ago

Oh. I'm sorry. I've been through many relationships that they either didn't care for me so much or w.. read more
Wow wow wow!! I felt your words in my soul! I too can relate to this poem. I am a sucker for love just as much as I am a stubborn lover who never wants to let go!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Days Ago

Thank you Benita, I'm glad that you could relate and that you had enjoyed it. I once was like you an.. read more
pretty good and emotion felt , keep up the work and ways that you express yourself i cant wait to see the upcoming pieces


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devious13

2 Days Ago

Why. Thanks for asking love. I'm give jus . Busy. With day to day. Is all. Yourself??
sinNsincerity

2 Days Ago

Well thank you for taking time to step out of your busy life to visit me. I am blessed to be here as.. read more
Devious13

1 Day Ago

i can understand that all to well at least you see the blessing some take the .. read more
what does the last line mean? Could thoroughly empathize with your words , that added to the beauty of my experience as usual. Simple and understood, well done

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


It's a decent idea, but the piece has some flow problems. The rhythm isn't there for me. I read it three or four times, but it still seemed to mesh unevenly. I could rationalize that, given the subject of the piece, the breaks in flow could represent the uneven feelings of heartbreak, or betrayal, but there's just something missing. Experimentation is great to improve your own skills, but this doesn't read like it's finished. Take all of this with a grain of salt, of course. Happy writing, Sin.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Weeks Ago

Is that salt iodized? Haha
No worries, I love when people give me their honest opinion. Some.. read more
The poem is ok. But you can do better. You have better poems people can read. I didn't like the part with the virginity thing haha. Maybe you can Find a better way to express it? Maybe a methapor?

My favorite part was:
I throw it all away for Love.
If I don't throw it all away,
...

I'm sure you can do better! Don't fall!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Jes' Pi

2 Weeks Ago

Well, work hard! Working is the key of success! Sometimes we fall and sometimes we rise up! My work .. read more
sinNsincerity

2 Weeks Ago

I'm already successful. I've turned down publishing offers except for one and I left that. They don'.. read more
Jes' Pi

2 Weeks Ago

Well, write for you, and then for others. There is not a limit when it'a about being the best. You c.. read more
Perhaps love teaches us about pain....A poem with the touch of pain, love brings in its wake. Enjoyed reading this so much.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you DIVYA, I'm really glad that you had enjoyed it. It's my pleasure.
what pain can causes into us. simply beautiful ....


Posted 2 Weeks Ago



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