Throw It all away for Love

Throw It all away for Love

A Poem by sinNsincerity
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Gospel

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You could never understand my pain.

Even if I allowed you to enter my brain.

So for heaven’s sake, I safeguard my heart, so you could never slide inside

unless we create an exodus in bed and partake in tasting the flesh.

And the secrets would most likely push you away, and that'll prove my point, so don't point the blame on me when you say I have brought pain onto you.

The girl I gave away my virginity to is so sacred and placed a curse on me, and it works so perfectly.

I throw it all away for Love.

If I don't throw it all away,

I will become...

It hurts so much to be,

so mote it be.


© 2017 sinNsincerity



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lots of angles addressed in this poem...i read some of the comments on flow and see how it seems so jagged ... there are many points vying for attention .. and the language switches back and forth form a very colloquial style to more classic ..such as "partake" of the flesh and the exodus in bed .. especially that being the condition held for your protagonist to allow a lover into his heart .. very conflicting ... and "mote" ... for me these change ups really make me think...and read again ... i like your closing two lines especially ...such great pain ... no matter how small it may seem to others is the way i take that ... obviously this poem hooked me ;) it is very different
E.

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Months Ago

Hook, line, and sinker!
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

:) ..............



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It's a decent idea, but the piece has some flow problems. The rhythm isn't there for me. I read it three or four times, but it still seemed to mesh unevenly. I could rationalize that, given the subject of the piece, the breaks in flow could represent the uneven feelings of heartbreak, or betrayal, but there's just something missing. Experimentation is great to improve your own skills, but this doesn't read like it's finished. Take all of this with a grain of salt, of course. Happy writing, Sin.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Is that salt iodized? Haha
No worries, I love when people give me their honest opinion. Some.. read more
The poem is ok. But you can do better. You have better poems people can read. I didn't like the part with the virginity thing haha. Maybe you can Find a better way to express it? Maybe a methapor?

My favorite part was:
I throw it all away for Love.
If I don't throw it all away,
...

I'm sure you can do better! Don't fall!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jes' Pi

1 Year Ago

Well, work hard! Working is the key of success! Sometimes we fall and sometimes we rise up! My work .. read more
sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm already successful. I've turned down publishing offers except for one and I left that. They don'.. read more
Jes' Pi

1 Year Ago

Well, write for you, and then for others. There is not a limit when it'a about being the best. You c.. read more
Perhaps love teaches us about pain....A poem with the touch of pain, love brings in its wake. Enjoyed reading this so much.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Thank you DIVYA, I'm really glad that you had enjoyed it. It's my pleasure.
what pain can causes into us. simply beautiful ....


Posted 1 Year Ago


Waaw it's so touching.
Amazing





Posted 1 Year Ago


Truly a heart touching piece with lessons to remember. Throwing it all away for love could only be wither fiery or as cold as ice.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

Posted 1 Year Ago


It's just so pretty? I really don't know how else to put it. Painfully pretty

Posted 1 Year Ago


damn,love can be so cold,it`s almost like god tricked us all about love,sometimes it`s just not worth the pain

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ty
Cascading rhythm and precision over a firm message.

Posted 1 Year Ago


We like to hang on to what is already gone from our lives - it causes us to suffer and in turn causes those around us to suffer because of it - in allowing one relationship to dissipate back into the folds of the universe we are able to greet new ones with new lessons learnt with fresh eyes ... the key is though, we gotta first learn how to let go, otherwise we may never see the beauty right underneath our noses.

I feel for the current girl ....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

and i'm at the gallows with my hand on the lever, should I pull it?
KWP

1 Year Ago

nah ... probably something you'd end up regretting in the next realm ;)
sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

shux...hmm...

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