Ms. Sadness

Ms. Sadness

A Poem by sinNsincerity

Fell in love with

the sadness,

which later,

became my passion.

The black became my friend.

Bested by the

light I was given.

So I caved in,

sorta like a caveman.

Then I died

again when she

glanced in.

I asked myself,

“should we dance

again?”

I couldn’t make up my mind so,

I fell back into the black

and wandered through

Wonders.

And now we’re back here,

falling in love with sadness

again.

So mote it be



© 2017 sinNsincerity



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sinNsincerity
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It's bittersweet as all hell when your talent prides itself on your repeated downfall, man.

I love this piece. It hit home in a couple of areas.

"The black became my friend.
Bested by the
light I was given.
So I caved in,
sorta like a caveman.
Then I died
again when she
glanced in."

Crazy. F*****g crazy. Loved the flow throughout, my man.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Week Ago

Hell yea man you get it. When people ask me what inspires me, I tell them that I write about the stu.. read more
Asante

1 Week Ago

That's an amazing thought process, bro. Won't lie, that inspired me instantly. "I feel that for me t.. read more



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the truth the whole truth and nothing but the truth eh!? ;) very much like your clever word play closing ... the journey through your poem so relatable ...too many times ...back to the cave we go ..loving the sadness ...trying to make sense of it all :( ahhhhhhhhh love! ;}
E.

Posted 4 Days Ago


"Fell in love with
the sadness,
which later,
became my passion." - First off, I absolutely love how plainly you've written this. It's not only relatable, but very comforting in the way of giving tragedy an identity.

"The black became my friend." - I really like the sudden abruptness of this sentence.

"Bested by the
light I was given." - this is a lovely sentence.

"So I caved in,
sorta like a caveman.
Then I died
again when she
glanced in." - I found it interesting and functional to add a bit of humor, or something representing that it
was attempted. It kind of gives me the image of someone who is heartbroken and trying to laugh it off or make light of their pain.

"I asked myself,
“should we dance
again?”
I couldn’t make up my mind so,
I fell back into the black
and wandered through
Wonders." - I found this absolutely beautiful. Relatable in a way that is hard to put into words and yet very keenly felt.

"And now we’re back here,
falling in love with sadness
again.
So mote it be" - again, you've expressed this in a wonderful way. The idea of falling in love with sadness is something so real and comforting to those who have done so, intentionally or not. The ending makes it a prayer or a spell and all the more bittersweet.

Overall, I loved this piece top to bottom and I think you've done a solid job on getting both your ideas and emotion across. Too often I read poems and simply see them, but I definitely felt this piece. Thank you much for sharing and keep up the good work!

-Rynn

Posted 4 Days Ago


The poem is very good. I appreciate that you got into this subject and didn't make it boring. It is short and on the subject.
My favorite lines were:
"Then I died
again when she
glanced in.
I asked myself,
“should we dance
again?”

Posted 5 Days Ago


"and now were back here
falling in love with sadness"

My favorite lines. Nice poem.

Posted 6 Days Ago


You have a way of taking the reader on a ride! I LOVE, LOVE, the emotion in this piece! Your work is where truth combines with reality opening up for all to feel connected in some way to the pieces you write! Well done! I fell in love with sadness before.
Tabby

Posted 1 Week Ago


It's hard to have a skill that relies so heavily on trauma, in all of its forms, to produce work that doesn't seem plastic. It's a good piece, I liked it. I think the harder emotions yield beautiful work. Of course, this calls into question the standard of beauty - but, that's a longer post. ^_^

Posted 1 Week Ago


Heartache :(( this is so sad and deep at the same time. I loved it :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


i think we wander through wonders more often than not,,just can`t seem to make up our minds

Posted 1 Week Ago


this poignantly captures a really difficult sentiment. well written

Posted 1 Week Ago


The phrase. "back into the black" really sticks with me. In a few short words it describes a very strong emotion, one many of us can relate to at times. Wonderful write!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Week Ago

Sweet, I'm glad that that phrase did stick out to you. I almost changed that into darkness, but then.. read more

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