Waiting to Fade

A feeling I had today, felt like I might as well make it a poem. This might be the shortest poem I've written.

I feel alone here

By myself

Always only cold

 

Fleeting, like summer snow

I do not know

Why the world shows me it’s back

 

Why the sky cries bright lights in the black pastures

Why must reality master and muster the people simply to prosper

Lost here, under the stars that dream to dance with the falling leaves like their still 18

 

It seems the sky looks down on me, but when I look at the sky I see meaning

More than just a ruby studded ceiling, more than just a feeling

Something engaging worth saving in an earth ball revealing the concert hurt on mother earth to only be

 

Nothing but a drop of bloody humanity in a velvet sea, bleeding, needing to be seen, but soon to be fleeting like the summer snow

Always only cold

 

By myself

I feel alone here

But we’re not that far away waiting to fade like yesterday

 

 

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[Rye]

I really enjoyed this write, it is really well expressed

[Najam Us Saher]

When we look at nature, the way we perceive it depends so much on how we are feeling at that time. This fact has been truly described by you in this poem. There are many lovely phrases in this poem which I liked the most. Thank you for writing this.

[Riddhi]

I actually liked your poem..And you are really true in your every line..I can feel it within..Really i felt each and every line ..But should i say you something your writing though everything was nice words were perfect , lines were perfect but do you thought it was a poem..Don't get hurted but if you want to improve your writing then i must say that write it like a poem..There is no doubt that the entire piece of writing was just too beautifully written that each just touched the reader's heart..But when you are categorising something under poem then try that it should be like a poem..overall , i really liked what you wrote and i hope that while writing your next writing you will keep what i told you now in mind and you will take what i said to you in a positive manner..
Keep on writing...
Riddhi

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"Beautiful" is the word that comes to me first after reading this poem... Really Beautiful!

[Jack O]

Death is no great feat. We all get there. I oft reply to somber - what care I?
Perhaps I am silly in my response to your post.
You might do well to remember that none of us are ever alone. Within six feet of every human is a spider.
Google it. there is always something watching you.
take care.

[wordman]

i guess we all feel alone ,and other people just seem to prosper
looks like someone is putting a hex on you i guess

[¿]

That's so great of you to share the feelings with us!
Mostly I liked the definition of the sky here....thinking the sky a ruby studded ceiling is compelling to think how actually it was to you....as I couldn't even bring that in my mind,....
Indeed it's your first short poem here but was asa good read as previous ones!