Faded

Everything I loved changes, everything I saw faded

Faded

 

My tears are bluer than the ocean

My soul lighter than the waves

My feet slight on the blades of grass sharper than a ballpoint pen that I pass past examined

My eyes darker than the caves under the ocean's faith

My mind a crusade against the raid of the beauty of life wiped off the earth disposed of for nothing reasonable nothing more than aftershave, crueller than our greed, the reality that feeds on me

My eyes greener than the trees spaced in place but creating shade colder than a blade and motion as the winds blow stronger than a man’s woe makes them shake like an earthquake

My words are taller than the skyscrapers, my way out, they’re a lifesaver making me feel pain recognize my own labour in a world darker than the night naked

Her presence was closer than my heart sacred, her smile golden like the sun’s maker, her laughter faded like the times taken, weighted like my world faking

Staking to this lake, this land, slowly breaking in the hands of a band of human viruses with a plan to turn the sandy beaches to glass, shattering my window to heaven, my memory of a better day more faded than an effigy of the plethora of what’s left of me, separate dreams, more lost than the theme of a thousand screams being silenced, being faded, fading away more plain than the white paper

My creativity faded, my view shaded, my essence hated, why crush creation? Why turn the wildlife into an empty Claymation of what used to be

What has faded, older than my life, bolder than my strife, packaged, bagged, sliced, sold for a price, not a grain of rice suffice a virus a device

My world has faded, leaving me behind in a burdened wasteland of dead friends, cruel men, islands on a bare land, for a grand, sold, the world, the sea, the land, slipping like sand through my fingers again

My happiness, my elation, saddened, sour, faded

More faded than my story

More faded than my memory

More faded, I can’t see anything

Faded, have we lost everything

Faded cleverly dismembered dreams stuck together, themes, cured of the concrete streets and high rises like a disease

Blow away, moving on like the breeze

Faded, released, more faded than the picture I see in front of me 

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[KCthelastboyscout]

Beautiful, dark poetry ( my favorite) easy to get lost on this darkness.not so easy getting out

[.]

The poem is beautiful!

"Well, not all things fade,
Some things fade because we love them.
See them with new thoughts,
And you will see new colours in them"

I really loved the poem.... I shall be glad if you could read my new poem "Warm Feelings in Cold Words" .. I have added some more stanzas in it.

[Christy the Poetic Hear..]

Your words and emotions are so deep that I feel like drowning into them. GREAT Job!!!!!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Emotions of a person makes one feel other mixed emotions too. Like colours we become multi-coloured too. I really like the way you express yourself. You bring out comparison from the entire universe.

[Davidgeo]

Dude... word economy. You really need to edit your poetry down.

The rhyming, I imagine, is your version of freestyle but after a dozen lines or so it becomes very trite.

I would completely re-do this with an eye for word economy while adding at least a little bit of structure. After reading a few of your most recent poems I have to say that freestyle rhyming is not your forte, you should try a different approach if you want to hold the readers attention or if you must stick with that approach try and pare down the writing to only the essentials... the phrase "show don't tell" is applicable to more than just screenplays and novels.

[wordman]

faded,sometimes the whole world seems faded