A Vision

A random haiku I wrote for my boyfriend who, unexpectedly, knew what a haiku is. :)

One more blushing sky

A distant vision of love

You and your guitar

Author's Note

It, somehow, appears a bit too simple. Won't you agree?

Reviews

[exotic flotsam]

No. Within the simplicity lies a plethora of complex emotion. "blushing" has multiple connotations; you, the sky, his song, him, the heavenly love... . So does "distant"; so close yet perhaps so far, he is away from you, the love itself extends at length, you wish the love were closer, he was closer emotionally... . Many consider Pachabel's Canon in D a mindlessly simple musical excercise in repetition. Simplicity fools the simple. If something looks or sounds simple, it is because excellence was its creator.

[Ian Faraway]

Poems should be simple by format but powerful, still, in its meaning like this one is. Three lines yet the vision is strong. J'adore! -Ian

[Suditi]

A great picture.
It's a superb haiku. It has such a happy vibe about it.

[Ruth]

I absolutely love it! Needs no more :) Beautiful xoxo

[Priya]

I agree fully with the featured review. Simplicity is but a gateway to complexity. Everything that appears simple holds underneath a wealth of information, emotion and what not! I think your words are perfect. They invoke just the right amount of emotions. Coupled with that beautiful picture, I think this is the perfect haiku for a boyfriend :)

[joshua deathdealer]

Beautiful!! Simple yet elegant in emotional volumes.

[Chris]

What we look back at...
only changes within us.
when we let it ...go.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Good friends and a guitar. No better way to spend a day. I like the artwork and the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dayran]

Its a nice picture....paints a great idyllic scene. What was the weather like on that day? Nice write!

[Silent Lover]

Do things simply, but not to simply - TaliasVan of Tora