I really wouldn't mind....

I really wouldn't mind....

A Poem by Dreamer

I really wouldn't mind....

if my breath would slow down to a halt,

my heart to stop beating completely,

for my depression to not see another day,

to sleep forever in a coffin...

cause at least I'd finally be at peace.

 

No, I truly wouldn't mind...if I lied down for one last time and didn't wake up.

I would love to take a final breath and DIE.


© 2013 Dreamer



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wow this is dark! but very rhythmically pleasing with good structure and message behind the words. can tell you wrote from the heart and thats the best kind of poetry! but please don't DIE we'd miss you!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thanks for your review fellow dreamer!
conveys such pain and despair. it sucks to suffer from depression.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

indeed it does. thanks for your comments
Wow this is very deep and dark, well written

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thank you, I tend to write a lot of dark poems
You seem to write a lot of dark poetry. If you ever need someone to talk to about it, I'm always here :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thanks I appreciate it, and yeah that seems to be mainly what I write about.
you sound soo sad and frustrated, be strong and keep writing because it helps alot and you are very good at it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thanks, I appreciate it
Vidya Bacchus

4 Years Ago

you are welcome
Great piece, proves you should stick around!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thanks.....
Wow,,you might not mind, but the rest of us will surely miss the writing. Stay strong , great write.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thank you..
Don't do that you have a beautiful soul kido :) and a wonderful sense of emotion in your work great job

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

Why thank you, Ryan! (:
David Burke

4 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Dreamer

4 Years Ago

I appreciate it :D
Very sad noone deserves to feel this way...great write

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

I agree, sadly a lot off people do feel this way though...
Thanks for your review, Koty
koty bell

4 Years Ago

I know doesnt make it right tho... :-( no prob
Dreamer

4 Years Ago

No, it certainly doesn't :(
You put the power in the words...

has the feel of real.

Damn, we do get so tired sometimes. Thing get so close and tight. Noise and silence - both at once. Being tired is easy... getting up is the biatch.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

4 Years Ago

very well said, thanks for your comments.
Chris

4 Years Ago

anytime... take care
Dreamer

4 Years Ago

thanks, you too

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My name is Katie, I'm a senior in high school who loves reading, writing & photography. My dream college is University of Cincinnati... I've wanted to go there since I was 8. I love playing soccer an.. more..

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