Blades & Blood

The tears are streaming down my face,

I pull out my pocket knife and examine it's blade.

I slit my wrists...blood trickles to the floor.

the pain doesn't bother me... it fact in a way it seems to comfort me.

One of these days, however, the sharpness of the blade just won't suffice

I'll pull out a pistol and end it for good, blood splattered everywhere and my body lying there on the floor.

Author's Note

it's a work in progress... open to suggestions & comments though

Reviews

[Chris]

It IS hard dealing with life... hard dealing with - just dealing. But the alternatives are anger and pain for the ones that gave a damn and for the ones that didn't - they still won't.

Control is pretty elusive for most people sometime or another and often getting just enough space to catch a breath seems so unreal. Life ain't fair and nothings free but ...there ARE people willing to listen, willing to reach out - if you give them the chance. And sometimes life isn't all that bad... one step, one day at a time - pause and breathe...then another.

[Dreamer]

I appreciate your thoughts!

[Patrick O'Neil]

It has a strong start, would like to see the progression , hopefully with a positive twist in the tail. Keep working it. Maybe take a deeper look at the the question why? there is this pain and self destruction ? But overall a good gripping start.

[Dreamer]

thanks for your suggestions!

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Is this written about you?

[Dreamer]

yeah.........

[❤ Maggie ❤]

Oh...I'm so sorry you feel this way..I wish there was some way I could help. You can message me anytime if you'd like. I know feelings that that can b overwhelming, I've been there..Just don't let it tear apart who you really are inside :) You are a talented, beautiful, unique person. I hope you can see that, too :) I'm here if you need anything..xo-Maggie

[Dreamer]

thanks Maggie... I appreciate it

[❤ Maggie ❤]

Of course :)

[beautiful dreamer]

again very dark but well written, a little abrupt ending though! oh yeah and happy early birthday in two days!

[Dreamer]

thank you for you're comments.
aww why thank you fellow dreamer (:

[beautiful dreamer]

you're welcome :)

[Relic]

Cutting is never good and never productive. Its a way of giving up without a fight. There are many poems here on the subject.

[Dreamer]

on the contrary...cutting is what happens when you can't stand in the battle anymore...you're not strong enough to fight

[Sami Khalil]

"I slit my wrists...blood trickles to the floor.

the pain doesn't bother me... it fact in a way it seems to comfort me."

[Dreamer]

is that your favorite line?

[Sami Khalil]

It is. That is why I quote it...:)..................

[Dreamer]

im glad you enjoyed it

[Sami Khalil]

:_).............................

[BubblingMe]

This is deep and dark, but I like it

[Dreamer]

thank you!

[David]

I like it very much, and I relate to this on a very high level

[Dreamer]

thank you!!!

[David]

You're welcome!!

[Dreamer]

........... (:

[Inda]

It's good, but to me it feels like its either too short or just lacking more character background, like who is this person?

[Dreamer]

it represents more than one person...it represents all the people who feel this way and cuts themselves... character background is different with each scenario.

[Coyote Poetry]

Many ways to find some kind of peace. Cutting I will never understand. Better to torture the world with your present and face. A interesting poem. Some people are looking for death and some people are trying to live forever. Thank you for the excellent poetry. You made me think this afternoon.
Coyote

[Dreamer]

you can't really torture the world with your presence when to them you seem invisible. Cutting, I know from experience doesn't make sense to many but to those who do it, it makes plenty of sense. it's rather hard to explain....
you're welcome... and I appreciate your thought provoking comments.