Blades & Blood

Blades & Blood

A Poem by Dreamer

The tears are streaming down my face,

I pull out my pocket knife and examine it's blade.

I slit my wrists...blood trickles to the floor.

the pain doesn't bother me... it fact in a way it seems to comfort me.

One of these days, however, the sharpness of the blade just won't suffice

I'll pull out a pistol and end it for good, blood splattered everywhere and my body lying there on the floor.


© 2013 Dreamer



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Dreamer
it's a work in progress... open to suggestions & comments though

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It IS hard dealing with life... hard dealing with - just dealing. But the alternatives are anger and pain for the ones that gave a damn and for the ones that didn't - they still won't.

Control is pretty elusive for most people sometime or another and often getting just enough space to catch a breath seems so unreal. Life ain't fair and nothings free but ...there ARE people willing to listen, willing to reach out - if you give them the chance. And sometimes life isn't all that bad... one step, one day at a time - pause and breathe...then another.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Dreamer

3 Years Ago

I appreciate your thoughts!



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It IS hard dealing with life... hard dealing with - just dealing. But the alternatives are anger and pain for the ones that gave a damn and for the ones that didn't - they still won't.

Control is pretty elusive for most people sometime or another and often getting just enough space to catch a breath seems so unreal. Life ain't fair and nothings free but ...there ARE people willing to listen, willing to reach out - if you give them the chance. And sometimes life isn't all that bad... one step, one day at a time - pause and breathe...then another.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

I appreciate your thoughts!
It has a strong start, would like to see the progression , hopefully with a positive twist in the tail. Keep working it. Maybe take a deeper look at the the question why? there is this pain and self destruction ? But overall a good gripping start.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thanks for your suggestions!
Is this written about you?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

❤ Maggie ❤

3 Years Ago

Oh...I'm so sorry you feel this way..I wish there was some way I could help. You can message me anyt.. read more
Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thanks Maggie... I appreciate it
❤ Maggie ❤

3 Years Ago

Of course :)
again very dark but well written, a little abrupt ending though! oh yeah and happy early birthday in two days!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thank you for you're comments.
aww why thank you fellow dreamer (:
beautiful dreamer

3 Years Ago

you're welcome :)
Cutting is never good and never productive. Its a way of giving up without a fight. There are many poems here on the subject.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

on the contrary...cutting is what happens when you can't stand in the battle anymore...you're not st.. read more
"I slit my wrists...blood trickles to the floor.

the pain doesn't bother me... it fact in a way it seems to comfort me."


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

It is. That is why I quote it...:)..................
Dreamer

3 Years Ago

im glad you enjoyed it
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

:_).............................
This is deep and dark, but I like it

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thank you!
I like it very much, and I relate to this on a very high level

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

thank you!!!
David Burke

3 Years Ago

You're welcome!!
Dreamer

3 Years Ago

........... (:
It's good, but to me it feels like its either too short or just lacking more character background, like who is this person?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

it represents more than one person...it represents all the people who feel this way and cuts themsel.. read more
Many ways to find some kind of peace. Cutting I will never understand. Better to torture the world with your present and face. A interesting poem. Some people are looking for death and some people are trying to live forever. Thank you for the excellent poetry. You made me think this afternoon.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreamer

3 Years Ago

you can't really torture the world with your presence when to them you seem invisible. Cutting, I kn.. read more

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My name is Katie, I'm a senior in high school who loves reading, writing & photography. My dream college is University of Cincinnati... I've wanted to go there since I was 8. I love playing soccer an.. more..

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