Invaded

Invaded

A Poem by SleeplessVolcano
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Painting by Pieter Schoubroeck, Burning Troy

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Walls conquered
gates broken
gold stolen
shouts, unspoken

Dust burning
death winning
cries growing
enemies, sinning

Couldn't surrender
white flags burnt
soul shackled
no lessons learnt.

© 2015 SleeplessVolcano


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nicely written, rhymes well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


we're on a roll it seems nice and super envious and withhold my curtsy..cause i can..loved it none the less..

Posted 8 Years Ago


SleeplessVolcano

8 Years Ago

Why thank you.....:) a compliment coming from you is akin to a Nobel prize in Literature.....;)
FateDictates

8 Years Ago

hey always give you good feedback! fate dictates that I be honest!!
Shows us the futility of war........Nicely done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


how true ...how terrible and tragic ... "Dust burning" very powerful line for me!
E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

i suppose acceptance of our "human" condition brings great comfort ... admitting it perhaps is the b.. read more
SleeplessVolcano

8 Years Ago

Such words of wisdom.....could end up in a poem.....;)
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

:) ..... yes indeed ;)
Yikes! You've got the rhythm down good on this one. Your words provoked in me a sense of chaos and a sadness. I find myself imagining that I am in the position of being invaded even though I very much do not want to be. I have to give this a 99 because it forced me into feeling and that is a sign of an excellent poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Tim Piotrowicz

8 Years Ago

May I find a place to sit nearby and watch? This could get interesting. We both know you'll get over.. read more
SleeplessVolcano

8 Years Ago

Maybe you know more than I do. Once bitten, twice shy, the saying goes, or translated into Confuc.. read more
Tim Piotrowicz

8 Years Ago

I was about to reply to you, but I made it into a little blog post instead. Hope you don't mind. read more

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"In the end there doesn't have to be anyone who understands you. There just has to be someone who wants to". Robert Brault Art washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life. ~ Pablo Pica.. more..

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