An out of the box touchdown - senryu

An out of the box touchdown - senryu

A Poem by SleeplessVolcano

I'm in your end zone
Can you see my outstretched arms?
Please pass me your heart.

© 2017 SleeplessVolcano



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Excellent use of metaphor in a flowing senryu!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lol
That is so cute

Love the football references lol

Posted 4 Months Ago


SleeplessVolcano

4 Months Ago

Maybe I'be been watching too many American football movies.....lol......maybe I should rather watch .. read more
Lingering Soul

3 Months Ago

Nooooo lol
A fine football metaphor. I enjoyed the poem even if I'm not allowed to enjoy the game any longer.

Posted 4 Months Ago


SleeplessVolcano

4 Months Ago

Thank you. Surely you can enjoy the game from the side-lines?
Fabian G. Franklin

4 Months Ago

The politics and protests have ruined it for me. It's a billionaires game played by millionaires com.. read more
oh i love this highly sentimental journey in senryu form ... in your second line i sense and imagine all the long journey it was to get there ..shy hellos, small significant gifts maybe ..a malt at the drug store (use to have them) ;)
i'm in the end zone..pass me your heart ..love this sir .. it is a classic keeper for sure!
E.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

between Middle Earth and Atlantis ..mwahvelous my friend simply mwahvelous ... i never was much of a.. read more
SleeplessVolcano

4 Months Ago

Growing in stature gives us a few inches, right? ;). Our gray hair must attest to something I hope :.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

ahahahha YES ...i am sure it does my friend! :)))))

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