First light

When you sleep

I sit in the hollow of your heart

When you breathe

Oxygen sways my thoughts

like a hammock in Hawaii

When I wake up

I'm right there

Making sure

that the first light you get

is not from the sun

but from my waiting eyes.

Reviews

[Amanda Trerotola]

I love your ending! It felt I was in the moment you were writing about.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Amanda......being "in the moment" and getting readers there is a writer's best reward:)

[Ardra]

Mmm beautiful... like then closing A lot

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks you very much......guess my inspiration has returned...:)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your closing lines reverberated through the mind of this reader! It deserves to garnish more comments.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Tx Kelly......Just one comment is enough for me...:)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I've always felt it was the quality of the comments - not the quanity! Take care! ; )

[ayesha cullen]

This is written in care and with passion. I love the easy-going tone of it.
Good work!

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Ayesha....and here I thought my tone is too easy.....but then again, I tend to complicate things sometimes.....thanks for the positive comment...:)

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Seems like you've been said to take care of someone and you took that much seriously!! Just great lovely read☺!!

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thank you very much.....Sometimes, I think, poets can get lost in words and forget that life has to reflect the things we say....:) I've been spending some quality time off-line and I'd say I'm a better person for it :)

[¿]

No doubt and indeed you are!!...
And you're heartedly welcome!😊