When I'm just me

You're not troubling me - 

I am troubled enough.

You throw bouncy pebbles

on my wide-calm surface

but in the deep

currents of life,

chaos churns the sands of my soul.

somewhere

the magma of my soul

touched

the water of my heart

so I'm sorry if you've got burned ~

I let off steam sometimes,

when I'm just me.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Love this imaginative and poetic way of saying sorry. Excellent expression.

Chris

[barleygirl]

Your poem reminds me of how, all my life, people have told me "you're so strong!" like I have no needs and no hurts hiding beneath my surface. Most people have no idea what they are throwing pebbles at. I love the pebble-throwing lines, so well done! No need to apologize at the end, but I get your point . . . you say "sorry" but you're not changing anything! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Margie :) Encouraging reviews like yours just makes me frantically look for a sharpened pencil ;) And yes, the "sorry" at the end, as you've correctly pointed out, is a genuine non-apology :) I've been practicing my pebble throwing a lot lately :) Going below the deeper waters is more challenging though - watch this space :)

[barleygirl]

I know what you mean about how hard it can be to go deep . . . that's why I often reside in the superficial waters of hilarity & nonsensical! *wink! wink!* I will definitely watch . . .

[Onlyme]

Sometimes the surface. Just needs a little bump for the inside to react. Nicely expressed.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Indeed - but we also need to be ready to deal with the undercurrent when it eventually shows its existence.....Thank you for reviewing :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Very cleverly written with sound basics of physical chemistry and reaction. Magma and water, a formidable combination. Bouncy pebbles on calm surface...ripples of chaos. Trouble!

[Lorry]

This is a really creative write, telling a tale most would recognise, from relationships and from life. Few, if any manage a life without scars and pain, mental and physical, yey even when we are wronged, we can become that level and strike out in defence. It is very true that in life there are no winners, just those that survived.
The combustion within doesnt care who set it off, it just wants out.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Ahhh...the "combustion within".....now that is going to trigger another poem....:)

Thanks for your review....mmmm...I wonder if I start a group for poets who are addicted to writing poetry - ya think I'd find many addicts? ;)

[Lorry]

In here? Throw a stick and you'll take out a dozen. Its definitely a love/ hate relationship, but only when the muse doesnt play fair... So its pretty much always love/hate. :)

[Ardra]

Mmmm chaos will always be part of our life isn't it.. like this one guy said...
Life line when we notice it is always up and down...and if it's straight then it means we are dead... so I guess we should be happy we are alive ....
Sometimes it's hard...but valuing the people who are important to us makes it all the more special... don't you agree... :)

That's a nice poem... worth musing ... :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thank you so much for your kind review....lol...pardon my quick day-dream, but if I ever was a dictator, and I could make any law that I wanted, Law # 44 would be:
"Any citizen found using the word "nice" in any form, shout be shot" ;)
When I eventually become supreme leader of that country, it would be best for you not to move there ;)

[SleeplessVolcano]

damn keyboard...."shout" should read "should"

[Ardra]

I will find my own kingdom and call it the nice kingdom... ;) so don't worry about the people who love that word can always find a welcoming home ...unlike your dictatorship...rule....mine is going to be better :p